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Grief is a Shower of Rocks

By Jane Hyphen on Mon, 08 Jun 2020

Grief is a shower of rocks Descending from the rolling clouds Which darkened the skies of my truth Each cusped and hard enough to Carve this strange...

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Away with the Fairies

By Jane Hyphen on Sat, 30 May 2020

I’ve never been away Away with the fairies I’m ever so envious Of those who have Lucidity being overrated And often quite tiring They talk about it...

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I Remember when there was So Much Space

By Jane Hyphen on Wed, 06 May 2020

I remember when there was So much space Stretching out in front of me like A vast ocean With sunlight sparkling upon waves I felt full Wondering what...

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Penelope is not your Friend

By Jane Hyphen on Fri, 01 May 2020

Penelope is not your friend Look deep in her eyes There’s a hair pin bend And a hellion blotch An open slit in the darkest spot To the sheerest drop...

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This starts of like a

Posted on Sun, 15 Sep 2019

This starts off like a painting I'd like to own and then zooms in like a drone on the microcosms which exist all around us. A wall may appear dead but on warm days watch carefully and it really does give birth. I remember holidaying a North Wales...

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Cold and beautiful. The

Posted on Sat, 24 Aug 2019

Cold and beautiful. The Little Matchstick Girl must be one of saddest stories, I love this twist on it because you've kept it clean yet adorned with imagery.

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Really interesting piece Di

Posted on Tue, 03 Sep 2019

Really interesting piece Di_Hard. These lines: 'use science to rock to and fro' and 'if we think we're at the top it's because others hold us up' particularly stand out. It all seems so precarious doesn't it, all it would take is a mad person...

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I enjoyed the way the grass

Posted on Sun, 28 Jul 2019

I enjoyed the way the grass stalks run like threads through this poem and the way it highlights the complexities in nature which we take for granted every moment. Those black beetles appear this time of year don't they, incongruously huge and...

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Hi, thank you for your

Posted on Wed, 03 Jul 2019

Hi, thank you for your comment onemore. There is so much inspiration you can take from travellers in all their forms, the transport and all the etiquette and frustration.

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You are categorically granite

Posted on Mon, 17 Jun 2019

You are categorically granite celticman.

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It truly is amazing isn't it

Posted on Tue, 18 Jun 2019

It truly is amazing isn't it Rhiannon. The butterfly life cycle and all those eels toing and froing to the Sargasso sea back to the Thames, the mind boggles. 'Some things beyond comprehension lie' for sure and the more we find out the more...

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This is so atmospheric,

Posted on Tue, 11 Jun 2019

This is so atmospheric, mostly grey in colour like all your writing but this isn't bleak, it has fresh air and the edges of nature hardening the characters. It would make a wonderful play but it's wonderful to read too. Full of clever phrases...

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Wow, this is really

Posted on Tue, 04 Jun 2019

Wow, this is really terrifying like a nightmare. It reminds me of The Pied Piper of Hamlyn but perhaps much worse because of the reality of our environment and the possibility of irreversible change. Trains and stations with young children are...

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Lovely piece Rhiannon. I

Posted on Thu, 23 May 2019

Lovely piece Rhiannon. I enjoyed the way you describe their beauty in yellow shades and also how you point out that they serve as a warning to the water's edge often hidden, I'd never thought of them like that. They are a very classy plant.