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Grief is a Shower of Rocks

By Jane Hyphen on Mon, 08 Jun 2020

Grief is a shower of rocks Descending from the rolling clouds Which darkened the skies of my truth Each cusped and hard enough to Carve this strange...

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Away with the Fairies

By Jane Hyphen on Sat, 30 May 2020

I’ve never been away Away with the fairies I’m ever so envious Of those who have Lucidity being overrated And often quite tiring They talk about it...

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I Remember when there was So Much Space

By Jane Hyphen on Wed, 06 May 2020

I remember when there was So much space Stretching out in front of me like A vast ocean With sunlight sparkling upon waves I felt full Wondering what...

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Penelope is not your Friend

By Jane Hyphen on Fri, 01 May 2020

Penelope is not your friend Look deep in her eyes There’s a hair pin bend And a hellion blotch An open slit in the darkest spot To the sheerest drop...

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It truly is amazing isn't it

Posted on Tue, 18 Jun 2019

It truly is amazing isn't it Rhiannon. The butterfly life cycle and all those eels toing and froing to the Sargasso sea back to the Thames, the mind boggles. 'Some things beyond comprehension lie' for sure and the more we find out the more...

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This is so atmospheric,

Posted on Tue, 11 Jun 2019

This is so atmospheric, mostly grey in colour like all your writing but this isn't bleak, it has fresh air and the edges of nature hardening the characters. It would make a wonderful play but it's wonderful to read too. Full of clever phrases...

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Wow, this is really

Posted on Tue, 04 Jun 2019

Wow, this is really terrifying like a nightmare. It reminds me of The Pied Piper of Hamlyn but perhaps much worse because of the reality of our environment and the possibility of irreversible change. Trains and stations with young children are...

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Lovely piece Rhiannon. I

Posted on Thu, 23 May 2019

Lovely piece Rhiannon. I enjoyed the way you describe their beauty in yellow shades and also how you point out that they serve as a warning to the water's edge often hidden, I'd never thought of them like that. They are a very classy plant.

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I enjoyed the intertwining of

Posted on Mon, 20 May 2019

I enjoyed the intertwining of the natural and the supernatural here Jenny and you've included so many elements from stars in the sky to the underwater plant life. The result is dreamy and full of magic.

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Really enjoyed this stand

Posted on Wed, 15 May 2019

Really enjoyed this stand-alone quirkdom. The uses of a potato know no bounds, it's no wonder the swan wanted to pass itself off as one.

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As others have said the first

Posted on Mon, 13 May 2019

As others have said the first verse is a perfect accolade to these woodland beauties and then you use them as an example of what could be lost. The rich won't share, there is evidence of that all around us and so much of our natural resources is...

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Thanks Insert. I'm pretty

Posted on Sat, 11 May 2019

Thanks Insert. I'm pretty horrified by the dehumanising of people in the workforce. I know it happened in the Victorian era but I believe there was a bit in the middle where things improved and now we are returning to those dark days. The sort of...

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Lots of texture and emotion

Posted on Tue, 30 Apr 2019

Lots of texture and emotion in this, the metaphor of a large rock, imperfect but unbreakable as this person in your life, it sounds like somebody we could all use. 'Holding my child with feet deep in your sand' is wonderful and you cannot help...

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It's incredible what these

Posted on Thu, 18 Apr 2019

It's incredible what these men and boys did each day, the risks and conditions, it must have been the comradarie that gone them through it and faith and trust as you say. The elderly man as an engineer had a huge responsibility but saw himself as...