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This Place
I’ve been here before, This place; I recognize the straggling, ugly, angry wallpaper; And the way the darkness rolls in from all the sides at once. I...
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Rainwillow Crossing (part 4 of 4)
“Is your hand burnt?” Eminlae crouched bes ide him. He'd been crying--wailing like a child. This poor girl had been helpless beside him. Yondel...
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Rainwillow Crossing (part 3 of 4)
A man came to the cottage the next morning. Shorgbran, he was called. He adopted an aggressive stance as he waited for Yondel to answer his knocking...
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Rainwillow Crossing (part 2 of 4)
Rainwillow Crossing had gotten off easy. There was no real other way of looking at it--unless you take survival as just another curse, just a longer...
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Rainwillow Crossing (part 1 of 4)
1 He tilled the soil. Always, he did that foremost. When he woke to a silver sunrise, when he looked out over past it, at the roiling fog, the soot-...
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This is nicely done. The
Posted on Sat, 04 Dec 2021
This is nicely done. The writing is smooth and visceral and still dramatic. You get some real feelings coming out here. I would have kinda liked to know a bit more about the whole parental meet though, maybe just a few details threaded here and...
Read full commentPosted in Suddenly in the End Zone
This really brings out the
Posted on Fri, 27 Aug 2021
This really brings out the emotional impact of losing the ability to communicate, the fear even more than the frustration. The style of the poem is all wrapped around the subject matter in a way that brings it to life and lets the reader get a...
Read full commentPosted in Aphasia
Loved it. This was bright and
Posted on Sat, 13 Mar 2021
Loved it. This was bright and fun, with a nice, smooth rhyme to it.
Read full commentPosted in Burglars beware!
never heard of once of these
Posted on Fri, 21 Apr 2023
never heard of once of these - great take on the inspiration point prompt.
Read full commentPosted in Squirting ‘cucumber’ …
I love this. The title draws
Posted on Thu, 13 Apr 2023
I love this. The title draws you straight in, and the story of the play reminds me of the stories i wrote when I was young and almost sent away though I had no idea what I was doing or where to send them to.
Read full commentPosted in Chaos Theory Applied to Pigeons
I like the fishing analogy.
Posted on Wed, 11 Jan 2023
I like the fishing analogy.
Read full commentPosted in Unexpected Birth Of A Poem
This is full of atmosphere
Posted on Tue, 03 Jan 2023
This is full of atmosphere and emotion, and it makes a solid impact. I think it might be a little bit longer than needed though. The first section packs the most punch. I think this could be (even) more effective with a shorter, sharper approach...
Read full commentPosted in Monster Mine
The rhyme and rhythm are
Posted on Sat, 27 Aug 2022
The rhyme and rhythm are really well done, you can hear it in your head as you read.
Read full commentPosted in What's the opposite?
A smart, well-written
Posted on Fri, 15 Apr 2022
A smart, well-written allegory.
Read full commentPosted in two men
oh yes. this gets it just
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
oh yes. this gets it just right. with a simple structure, economy of prose, and little fuss.
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