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This is very beautiful and
Posted on Fri, 15 May 2015
This is very beautiful and expresses a genuine and heartfelt devotion, Rhiannon. I'd love to hear it sung to the music i imagined for it. I found the repeated 'and I want to' very moving.
Beautiful pictures and an outflowing of love in this. In line 9 - did you mean breathes? And I wonder if the first of the repeated word 'heart' in lines 26 and 28 could be changed, and if it might be better, or not, if you did. Lovely, the stream...
This has a Cider With Rosie type memory feel about it. Innocence and honesty combined, and the fruit makes it juicy to read with a child's eye view and taste of the occasion. It's special, this one.
So pleased you saw all that Vera. I hope your Mum's right - although for some reason, reading her motto brought a tear to my eye - a good one. Thank you.
I love the jumpiness of - white bum, fawn gone at the end. Catching a glimpse of something so special makes a treasured memory, especially if you can capture it in such beautify of words, as you have done here, Tina.
This seems virtually the same as the story form which I was able to read by going through the comments button. The ending is sharp - made me feel as sad as the fact that she had to know so much about the tastes of her regular users. I really felt...
'She didn't love me as much' means she did love you. It wasn't good enough though, and not your fault. Maybe not anyone's fault. Your writing shows great understanding and insight that I believe might help others. Admired.
This is very beautiful and
Posted on Fri, 15 May 2015
This is very beautiful and expresses a genuine and heartfelt devotion, Rhiannon. I'd love to hear it sung to the music i imagined for it. I found the repeated 'and I want to' very moving.
Read full commentPosted in Sunday Song
Beautiful pictures and an
Posted on Sun, 10 May 2015
Beautiful pictures and an outflowing of love in this. In line 9 - did you mean breathes? And I wonder if the first of the repeated word 'heart' in lines 26 and 28 could be changed, and if it might be better, or not, if you did. Lovely, the stream...
Read full commentPosted in For Lisa
Love seeps and flows and this
Posted on Sun, 03 May 2015
Love seeps and flows and this is very fluid in its movement. There's something joyful and accepting about it. I really like it.
Read full commentPosted in Where wild water flows
This has a Cider With Rosie
Posted on Sat, 02 May 2015
This has a Cider With Rosie type memory feel about it. Innocence and honesty combined, and the fruit makes it juicy to read with a child's eye view and taste of the occasion. It's special, this one.
Read full commentPosted in Measles
So pleased you saw all that
Posted on Mon, 27 Apr 2015
So pleased you saw all that Vera. I hope your Mum's right - although for some reason, reading her motto brought a tear to my eye - a good one. Thank you.
Read full commentPosted in Tree Me
Guess it's all about just
Posted on Sun, 19 Apr 2015
Guess it's all about just being there. There's something very real, yet intangible about the subject.
Loved this one, Ed.
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Read full commentPosted in Pillow Talk
We don't appreciate what we
Posted on Mon, 20 Apr 2015
We don't appreciate what we've got till it's gone. Though it's written in a light tone, I found this particularly moving.
Read full commentPosted in Black Was Her
I love the jumpiness of -
Posted on Fri, 27 Mar 2015
I love the jumpiness of - white bum, fawn gone at the end. Catching a glimpse of something so special makes a treasured memory, especially if you can capture it in such beautify of words, as you have done here, Tina.
Read full commentPosted in Spotted at Dawn
This seems virtually the same
Posted on Thu, 26 Mar 2015
This seems virtually the same as the story form which I was able to read by going through the comments button. The ending is sharp - made me feel as sad as the fact that she had to know so much about the tastes of her regular users. I really felt...
Read full commentPosted in Kiss my Ass Sofia: re-posted as a poem
'She didn't love me as much'
Posted on Thu, 26 Mar 2015
'She didn't love me as much' means she did love you. It wasn't good enough though, and not your fault. Maybe not anyone's fault. Your writing shows great understanding and insight that I believe might help others. Admired.
Read full commentPosted in Mama
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