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A Piece of Cake
So far so good.
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In the Garden Room
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Wings of Silence
Past failures
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About a Boy
He's made from chocolate !
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Oh my goodness - an arpeggio
Posted on Fri, 29 Aug 2014
Oh my goodness - an arpeggio of butterflies! I can see the exact movement in a musical picture. I feel the tension in this, of waiting. And the rush at the start. Great writing is like painting and you are an artist, Tina.
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'less embarrassing things to
Posted on Mon, 25 Aug 2014
'less embarrassing things to discuss than death.' This line stands out to me. Such a quick pace in this poem, as if glossing over the unwanted sight of grief. And then her desolation in the ordinaryness of weather. So moving and undramatically...
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Hi Tina. What really gets me
Posted on Mon, 18 Aug 2014
Hi Tina. What really gets me about this piece is that I can hear as much as I can see in it. Brilliant and as usual, very beautiful - as are those memories. That's a great title, too.
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So clever how you use and
Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014
So clever how you use and develop the intensity and clarity of vision from nature in minute detail through to the shocking reality of the last subject. It sort of creeps up on you - you see where you are being led, but it gets you anyway....
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It is what it is, Rhiannon.
Posted on Sat, 19 Jul 2014
It is what it is, Rhiannon. Feelings well explored. I was interested at your differing rhymes that seem to fit really well here, with the changing moods and opinions of the subject. Hard to deal with, but there seems a great deal of understanding...
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The theme is really cleverly
Posted on Tue, 15 Jul 2014
The theme is cleverly worked into this along with the message. Fabulously rhyming, too, which for me keeps the interest and enhances the subject matter.
I enjoyed reading your poem so much, Rhiannon, and I'll have another look at it later...
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This is beautiful, Shannon
Posted on Tue, 15 Jul 2014
This is beautiful, Shannon and very moving. I'm not always into love poems, but this one is so honest and true, it drew me in and also made me think.
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Hi Frances.
Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014
Hi Frances.
Thanks for the explanation - that was really interesting. Read your poem again and still like it very much.
Bee x
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It should have got in. Just
Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014
It should have got in. Just one small point - I believed rhino horn is not bone, but compacted hair. But then I read:
'The rhino's horn has no bone in it at all. The fact that it is made entirely of keratin led scientists to guess that it...
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There is something delicate
Posted on Mon, 07 Jul 2014
Hi Maisie.
There is something delicate and wistful about this poem that I really liked. I thought the way you switched tenses back and forth made it interesting, too. I found I had to really think about that.
Liked and enjoyed.
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