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Thinking positive
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Standing
Why do flies choose eyes?
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Poem for the wind
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Hi Poetica.
Posted on Mon, 02 Jun 2014
Hi Poetica.
I like this poem because although it is an outpouring of emotion, which is a good thing, and something I have often found to be very helpful, you have taken the time and trouble to think carefully about the structure and rhyme...
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She has a voice! Love it!
Posted on Sat, 31 May 2014
She has a voice!
Love it!
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I love this poem, too. I wish
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
I love this poem, too. I wish everyone in the world could read it, especially those who would / should see themselves in it. It should be filmed and shown between adverts on TV. And I'd love this to be the next poem of the week. Really well done...
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Hi socialeaf.
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
Hi socialeaf.
In my mind, I can see it, hear it, and feel the power. It's only my opinion, but I think the fist stanza might not be needed, and that the poem would be stronger starting with the second. But as I said, that's only my...
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This is a brilliant story,
Posted on Mon, 19 May 2014
This is a brilliant story, Moya, and sad. I kept thinking that it might be better for the story if he just had 'trench foot', rather than a bad case of it. Otherwise he might not be able to continue - once gangrene had set in, and all. But I...
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Oh, that's so horrible! The
Posted on Fri, 02 May 2014
Oh, that's so horrible! The picture brings to life her emotions as much as your lovely poem does. I can just imagine the moment the sun is blocked out and the tomb is sealed.
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This is fun and educational.
Posted on Sat, 26 Apr 2014
This is fun and educational. Loads of great rhymes add to the fun, and that first verse - I loved that. Brilliant!
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Hi Lindy.
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
Hi Lindy.
I like the story, especially the parts where it comes through her own thoughts, and in the brief dialogue. It might just be me but the first half sounds a bit too 'telling', if that makes sense, and I wondered if it could be...
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My dad couldn't do that
Posted on Fri, 28 Mar 2014
My dad couldn't do that either, aside from being somewhat inconsiderate to slugs, he's a softy too. It was pretty heartbreaking at the time. I kind of imagined I could crush up worms for it, but everyone was against any effort to save it. I've...
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I think this is brilliant,
Posted on Mon, 24 Mar 2014
I think this is brilliant, Tina. I love the seemingly glib tone as you summarise life listing the facts with a throwaway casualness that is half bitter, half sweet with a clever wit that softens what is in places, sad but also factual. My...
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