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Panic Unnecessary
Thoughts
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Bleak is the Night
Down in the moments
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Going Round in Circles
Finding a way out
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Flight of the Bumblebee
Edited version of one I posted some time back, but have been working on ever since. Had to post it now - it's doing my head in.
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Hi Trish.
Posted on Tue, 18 Feb 2014
Hi Trish.
Its so great you've used your 'Thought' and turned it into a poem. I love that you are so positive and always try to bring sunshine. I really like the idea of the first stanza, but I think the second still needs a little work as...
Read full commentPosted in My Thought Of The Moment.
I liked the child-like
Posted on Thu, 13 Feb 2014
I liked the child-like quality of the sentences - eg. 'Another day, a long time ago, I was stepping out of a boat and tripped and hit my head very hard.' For me, the apparent simplicity is what takes you back and forth, as mentioned by scratch...
Read full commentPosted in The Passageway
It is the embodiment of Death
Posted on Fri, 07 Feb 2014
It is the embodiment of Death and Rebirth;
like how a beautiful rose blossoms in the spring
only to wither away and die from the touch
of the purifying entity christened as "Winter".
Hi MT. In my mind, this is...
Read full commentPosted in Winter (Edited)
You really captured the
Posted on Tue, 04 Feb 2014
You really captured the feelings.
Enjoyed.
Read full commentPosted in In Your Light
This is very real writing and
Posted on Mon, 27 Jan 2014
This is very real writing and believable. I like the way you end up feeling for both characters even though you want him to have the strength to leave such a destructive relationship, which although is horrendously bad at times, seems for the...
Read full commentPosted in Please Don't Go.
Hi delapruch.
Posted on Wed, 01 Jan 2014
Hi delapruch.
This shouts with attitude from a 'realist' point of view - opening with an obsevation regarding the obligation for forced fun in celebration of what is unlikely to be any different to the previous situation, the reasoning...
Read full commentPosted in same year’s eve
There is an amazing bright,
Posted on Mon, 30 Dec 2013
There is a bright, wry humour to this, Tina, and much more to it than first meets the eye. It's cleverly built, with subtle use of rhyme, and her touch of apparent wickedness, for me, makes it fascinatingly enjoyable and sad in equal measure.
Read full commentPosted in Merry Christmas Mrs Lawrence
This was so lovely. What a
Posted on Sun, 01 Dec 2013
This was so lovely. What a great tribute to your loving mum! My daughter lives in Tennessee - I'll ask her if she knows Sneedville, and tell her about your poem.
Thank you for sharing this,
Read full commentPosted in Sneedville, Tennessee
This tickled me! You've made
Posted on Thu, 28 Nov 2013
This tickled me! You've made a fun piece out of what is a generally annoying subject for me.
Well done!
Read full commentPosted in For a Long Time I Went To Bed Early! I.P.
Interesting, Elsie - I
Posted on Sun, 06 Oct 2013
Interesting, Elsie - I enjoyed thinking about this.
Read full commentPosted in Knit we Together
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