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Night Visitor
Early childhood memory
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Dear Elsie,
Posted on Sat, 30 Aug 2014
Dear Elsie,
so nice to see you again. This piece is beautifully written with warmth and honest affection. Sounds like you had so much fun together and made some great memories. Such a lovely letter. She sounds wonderful.
Bee x...
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Oh my goodness - an arpeggio
Posted on Fri, 29 Aug 2014
Oh my goodness - an arpeggio of butterflies! I can see the exact movement in a musical picture. I feel the tension in this, of waiting. And the rush at the start. Great writing is like painting and you are an artist, Tina.
Read full commentPosted in Days Like These
'less embarrassing things to
Posted on Mon, 25 Aug 2014
'less embarrassing things to discuss than death.' This line stands out to me. Such a quick pace in this poem, as if glossing over the unwanted sight of grief. And then her desolation in the ordinaryness of weather. So moving and undramatically...
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Hi PT. This is written in a
Posted on Thu, 21 Aug 2014
Hi PT. This is written in a matter of fact fashion that casually tells of your early school life with the acceptance of discipline which must have brought fear on an every day basis. It's a fact that teachers don't always know what to do in order...
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Hi Tina. What really gets me
Posted on Mon, 18 Aug 2014
Hi Tina. What really gets me about this piece is that I can hear as much as I can see in it. Brilliant and as usual, very beautiful - as are those memories. That's a great title, too.
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So clever how you use and
Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014
So clever how you use and develop the intensity and clarity of vision from nature in minute detail through to the shocking reality of the last subject. It sort of creeps up on you - you see where you are being led, but it gets you anyway....
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It is what it is, Rhiannon.
Posted on Sat, 19 Jul 2014
It is what it is, Rhiannon. Feelings well explored. I was interested at your differing rhymes that seem to fit really well here, with the changing moods and opinions of the subject. Hard to deal with, but there seems a great deal of understanding...
Read full commentPosted in Self-Absorbed
The theme is really cleverly
Posted on Tue, 15 Jul 2014
The theme is cleverly worked into this along with the message. Fabulously rhyming, too, which for me keeps the interest and enhances the subject matter.
I enjoyed reading your poem so much, Rhiannon, and I'll have another look at it later...
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This is beautiful, Shannon
Posted on Tue, 15 Jul 2014
This is beautiful, Shannon and very moving. I'm not always into love poems, but this one is so honest and true, it drew me in and also made me think.
Read full commentPosted in Love Feels Time
Hi Frances.
Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014
Hi Frances.
Thanks for the explanation - that was really interesting. Read your poem again and still like it very much.
Bee x
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