Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
Agree with insert, very
Posted on Wed, 02 Jan 2019
Agree with insert, very accomplished work, much enjoyed!
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Really engaging, sharp
Posted on Wed, 02 Jan 2019
Really engaging, sharp writing and lots of great characters and developments skilfully introduced
Read full commentPosted in After The Funeral (Part 1)
Great idea well-executed...
Posted on Wed, 21 Nov 2018
Great idea well-executed... particularly liked the builder's tenor, and the last stanza was really pretty
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this is beautiful and perfect
Posted on Wed, 21 Nov 2018
this is beautiful and perfect and full of love
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Good work Hilary, clipped
Posted on Tue, 20 Nov 2018
Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
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I don't think I know how to
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I don't think I know how to pronounce it haha. I should have called the website Abctales! Made the whole thing a black mirror type story
Read full commentPosted in Aura (17)
Ah that's the second phlegm
Posted on Tue, 06 Nov 2018
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
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That's interesting. I think I
Posted on Mon, 05 Nov 2018
That's interesting. I think I thought it would be cool for one bit, then I was like wait that doesn't work at all, or make any sense haha
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Absorbing stuff, great energy
Posted on Tue, 13 Nov 2018
Absorbing stuff, great energy and enthusiasm. Gritty and lots of great descriptions throughout. Cane clicking is really effective. Enjoyed.
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I could make the very first
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I could make the very first sentence 'a bad cold was going round...'
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