Great piece, quietly affecting and great wee details throughout, flaked almonds on the train, rolling cigarettes, really effective in giving life to all the different characters. Nice optimistic touch at the end. Much enjoyed reading
Enjoyed reading, its existence somewhere between waking, dreams, and dashes of memories... a leap from Sheffield Wednesday to Real Madrid too. Touches of murakami, nice work
Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
'Fanning it with her hand'...
Posted on Mon, 28 Jan 2019
'Fanning it with her hand'... great, wee observational touches like this is part of what sets you apart
Pretty part, sweet dialogue
Read full commentPosted in Angel 10 (bromance)
Great piece, quietly
Posted on Sat, 16 Feb 2019
Great piece, quietly affecting and great wee details throughout, flaked almonds on the train, rolling cigarettes, really effective in giving life to all the different characters. Nice optimistic touch at the end. Much enjoyed reading
Read full commentPosted in The Riots
Enjoyed reading, its
Posted on Thu, 17 Jan 2019
Enjoyed reading, its existence somewhere between waking, dreams, and dashes of memories... a leap from Sheffield Wednesday to Real Madrid too. Touches of murakami, nice work
Read full commentPosted in Strange bedfellows
Agree with insert, very
Posted on Wed, 02 Jan 2019
Agree with insert, very accomplished work, much enjoyed!
Read full commentPosted in After The Funeral (Part 2)
Really engaging, sharp
Posted on Wed, 02 Jan 2019
Really engaging, sharp writing and lots of great characters and developments skilfully introduced
Read full commentPosted in After The Funeral (Part 1)
Great idea well-executed...
Posted on Wed, 21 Nov 2018
Great idea well-executed... particularly liked the builder's tenor, and the last stanza was really pretty
Read full commentPosted in Tessitura
this is beautiful and perfect
Posted on Wed, 21 Nov 2018
this is beautiful and perfect and full of love
Read full commentPosted in Lines Written On My Mother's 90th Birthday
Good work Hilary, clipped
Posted on Tue, 20 Nov 2018
Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
Read full commentPosted in A Casual Murder
I don't think I know how to
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I don't think I know how to pronounce it haha. I should have called the website Abctales! Made the whole thing a black mirror type story
Read full commentPosted in Aura (17)
Ah that's the second phlegm
Posted on Tue, 06 Nov 2018
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
Read full commentPosted in Aura (13)
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