Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
Cheers kindly again :) Had a first post-diagnostic support appointment yesterday and feeling a bit of an info overload atm, but I'll get stuck into this soon, over the weekend! Am game for the added academic jargon challenge ...
You've crafted something pretty and warm and intriguing. Loved 'cool-water gaze', perfect description. I think the tone is really important here and you've got it down, warm inviting prose
Pretty, taut prose, lots of nice observational touches... subject suits your style too... always a strong heart/humanity underpinning everything you write I think...
this is beautiful and perfect
Posted on Wed, 21 Nov 2018
this is beautiful and perfect and full of love
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Good work Hilary, clipped
Posted on Tue, 20 Nov 2018
Good work Hilary, clipped along at an engaging pace. I liked some of the touches throughout, 'in his mind he had many demons', and 'she wasn't letting him take control'. The latter was a strong, sudden, chilling sentence.
Read full commentPosted in A Casual Murder
I don't think I know how to
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I don't think I know how to pronounce it haha. I should have called the website Abctales! Made the whole thing a black mirror type story
Read full commentPosted in Aura (17)
Ah that's the second phlegm
Posted on Tue, 06 Nov 2018
Ah that's the second phlegm misspelling i've racked up! Which probably means i've used that word once too many. How much phlegm is necessary for one story? That's what i really hope to learn from this.
Read full commentPosted in Aura (13)
That's interesting. I think I
Posted on Mon, 05 Nov 2018
That's interesting. I think I thought it would be cool for one bit, then I was like wait that doesn't work at all, or make any sense haha
Read full commentPosted in Aura (10)
Absorbing stuff, great energy
Posted on Tue, 13 Nov 2018
Absorbing stuff, great energy and enthusiasm. Gritty and lots of great descriptions throughout. Cane clicking is really effective. Enjoyed.
Read full commentPosted in Jack The Being
I could make the very first
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I could make the very first sentence 'a bad cold was going round...'
Read full commentPosted in Aura (15)
Cheers kindly again :) Had a
Posted on Tue, 06 Nov 2018
Cheers kindly again :) Had a first post-diagnostic support appointment yesterday and feeling a bit of an info overload atm, but I'll get stuck into this soon, over the weekend! Am game for the added academic jargon challenge ...
Read full commentPosted in Aspie Life
You've crafted something
Posted on Fri, 02 Nov 2018
You've crafted something pretty and warm and intriguing. Loved 'cool-water gaze', perfect description. I think the tone is really important here and you've got it down, warm inviting prose
Read full commentPosted in The Empathy Files. The Angel of Empathy (3)
Pretty, taut prose, lots of
Posted on Thu, 01 Nov 2018
Pretty, taut prose, lots of nice observational touches... subject suits your style too... always a strong heart/humanity underpinning everything you write I think...
Read full commentPosted in The Empathy Files. The Angel of Empathy (2)
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