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The ending was perfect

Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015

The ending was perfect without being in any way slushy, because not only did it satisfacually tie the story together, it said all that needed to be said. It's a really sad story, and moving, but very realistic in all the outcomes, too.  

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Hauntingly written, which by

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

Hauntingly written, which by the end I understood why.

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Posted in To Every Picture a Story

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Lots of emotion expressed in

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

Lots of emotion expressed in this. Feels like it comes straight from the heart, and worth perhaps an edit. But that's just what I would do - keep working on a poem if I think it's worthwhile, and I do.

'ypur wide has pulled up the car' -...

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Posted in Negative Spaces

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This is beautiful and wishful

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

This is beautiful and wishful. I do agree with scratch about the last verse. For me, it just goes over to the point of spoiling it a bit, but then I read again without the last verse, and I think it could work well if you cut it. Perhaps ending...

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Posted in Plant Me A Tree

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Hi AE.

Posted on Fri, 14 Aug 2015

Hi AE.

I think you have edited this a couple of times and think it works really well now. There's uncertaity about change, and the question of whether there would be anything on the other side. 

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Posted in Starting over

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'somehow thought that Sadie

Posted on Thu, 13 Aug 2015

'somehow thought that Sadie wasn't going to give up on this potential gold mine without trying again.' He gets a bit confused, I think, between the actual gold and the roll of twenty pound notes he thinks sadie's after. 

I thought it's...

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Posted in The Wanderlust Lady and the Door to Door Salesman - 16

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'Abortion is a privacy issue.

Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015

'Abortion is a privacy issue. An unwanted baby is like an alien living inside of your body.' 

As an entire piece of writing, I found it somewhat lacking in understanding as it seems to imply that this - 'An unwanted baby is like an alien...

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Posted in Abortion

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It's just perfect.

Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015

It's just perfect.

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Posted in Elephant Song

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Heartbreaking last line in an

Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015

Heartbreaking last line in an honest hearted poem, Tina. Some feelings never leave, and guilt has a nasty habit of clinging on the longest, whether right, or wrong.

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Posted in For What it's Worth...

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That dress did me in, Tina.

Posted on Sun, 02 Aug 2015

That dress did me in, Tina. And I loved -

'her ancient Aran jumper...
... it might unburden me...at least
be a vehicle for my grief...
 
but when I open the door...see its arms folded 
across its chest in...

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Posted in Clothes-Speak

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