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Life is a Book of Apologies
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Flesh in Profile (poetry monthly)
it's FLASHED bits of tits accidentally visible in SHOCK - ing moments of mother baby intimacy that often angers Joe Public more than porn does
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Result! (part 1)
Feeling thankful!
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Delicately done, Tina, and
Posted on Fri, 21 Aug 2015
Delicately done, Tina, and beautiful. Layered with meaning.
Read full commentPosted in Blossom Trees
The ending was perfect
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
The ending was perfect without being in any way slushy, because not only did it satisfacually tie the story together, it said all that needed to be said. It's a really sad story, and moving, but very realistic in all the outcomes, too.
Read full commentPosted in Please, leave the light on. ( The reply)
Hauntingly written, which by
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
Hauntingly written, which by the end I understood why.
Read full commentPosted in To Every Picture a Story
Lots of emotion expressed in
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
Lots of emotion expressed in this. Feels like it comes straight from the heart, and worth perhaps an edit. But that's just what I would do - keep working on a poem if I think it's worthwhile, and I do.
'ypur wide has pulled up the car' -...
Read full commentPosted in Negative Spaces
This is beautiful and wishful
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
This is beautiful and wishful. I do agree with scratch about the last verse. For me, it just goes over to the point of spoiling it a bit, but then I read again without the last verse, and I think it could work well if you cut it. Perhaps ending...
Read full commentPosted in Plant Me A Tree
Hi AE.
Posted on Fri, 14 Aug 2015
Hi AE.
I think you have edited this a couple of times and think it works really well now. There's uncertaity about change, and the question of whether there would be anything on the other side.
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'somehow thought that Sadie
Posted on Thu, 13 Aug 2015
'somehow thought that Sadie wasn't going to give up on this potential gold mine without trying again.' He gets a bit confused, I think, between the actual gold and the roll of twenty pound notes he thinks sadie's after.
I thought it's...
Read full commentPosted in The Wanderlust Lady and the Door to Door Salesman - 16
'Abortion is a privacy issue.
Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015
'Abortion is a privacy issue. An unwanted baby is like an alien living inside of your body.'
As an entire piece of writing, I found it somewhat lacking in understanding as it seems to imply that this - 'An unwanted baby is like an alien...
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It's just perfect.
Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015
It's just perfect.
Read full commentPosted in Elephant Song
Heartbreaking last line in an
Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015
Heartbreaking last line in an honest hearted poem, Tina. Some feelings never leave, and guilt has a nasty habit of clinging on the longest, whether right, or wrong.
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