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I felt that panic I get in

Posted on Sat, 22 Aug 2015

I felt that panic I get in this situation. This would be a great one to read aloud at a reading, Rhiannon. Well worded and such a sharp contrast to your lovely nature walks I so enjoy. But I did enjoy this too. Excellently conveyed. 

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Posted in Blue Mood Mall

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Great story Tina. You've

Posted on Sat, 22 Aug 2015

Great story Tina. You've explored all the emotions beautifully. Once they'd decided the comparisons of the two life support machines and possibilities of disabilities for either child, the only real question was whether they could cope.

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Posted in The X Factor

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In the face of impending doom

Posted on Fri, 21 Aug 2015

In the face of impending doom we bury our heads in the sand and worry about trivialities, because we can do nothing about the bigger picure, except feel oddly guilty for self imposed ignorance by necessity. Probably over thinking - but then, I do...

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Posted in Sleep Walking

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Delicately done, Tina, and

Posted on Fri, 21 Aug 2015

Delicately done, Tina, and beautiful. Layered with meaning.

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Posted in Blossom Trees

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The ending was perfect

Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015

The ending was perfect without being in any way slushy, because not only did it satisfacually tie the story together, it said all that needed to be said. It's a really sad story, and moving, but very realistic in all the outcomes, too.  

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Posted in Please, leave the light on. ( The reply)

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Hauntingly written, which by

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

Hauntingly written, which by the end I understood why.

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Posted in To Every Picture a Story

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Lots of emotion expressed in

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

Lots of emotion expressed in this. Feels like it comes straight from the heart, and worth perhaps an edit. But that's just what I would do - keep working on a poem if I think it's worthwhile, and I do.

'ypur wide has pulled up the car' -...

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Posted in Negative Spaces

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This is beautiful and wishful

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

This is beautiful and wishful. I do agree with scratch about the last verse. For me, it just goes over to the point of spoiling it a bit, but then I read again without the last verse, and I think it could work well if you cut it. Perhaps ending...

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Posted in Plant Me A Tree

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Hi AE.

Posted on Fri, 14 Aug 2015

Hi AE.

I think you have edited this a couple of times and think it works really well now. There's uncertaity about change, and the question of whether there would be anything on the other side. 

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Posted in Starting over

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'somehow thought that Sadie

Posted on Thu, 13 Aug 2015

'somehow thought that Sadie wasn't going to give up on this potential gold mine without trying again.' He gets a bit confused, I think, between the actual gold and the roll of twenty pound notes he thinks sadie's after. 

I thought it's...

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Posted in The Wanderlust Lady and the Door to Door Salesman - 16

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