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A Secret Garden
Audio version at https://soundcloud.com/user-62051685/a-secret-garden-mp3 A Secret Garden Sinking sun creeping lower, stalking horizons, rays of...
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When November Comes (with audio)
Audio version at https://soundcloud.com/user-62051685/when-november-comes-mp3 When November Comes Leaves of russet curl into balls of withered rust,...
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A Lorry Load of Sleaze
This is part 5 in the satirical series at https://www.abctales.com/collection/pandemic-tales-bojo-and-co A Lorry Load of Sleaze “Oh do shove over...
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The Black Crow of Purgatory (Part 3 of 3)
Draft for a 3 part short story Part One at https://www.abctales.com/story/marandina/black-crow-purgatory-part-1-3 Part two at https://www.abctales...
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The Black Crow of Purgatory (Part 2 of 3)
Draft for a 3 part short story Part one at https://www.abctales.com/story/marandina/black-crow-purgatory-part-1-3 The Black Crow of Purgatory Part 2...
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Read both parts. Really
Posted on Tue, 03 Dec 2024
Read both parts. Really enjoyed. You have left it in a way that it could be added to.
Of course, an important underlying message about the environment but delivered in a way that avoids sledgehammer lack of subtlety. Let the reader absorb...
Read full commentPosted in The Road To Ponkerton Village - Part 2
Gloriously surreal with an
Posted on Sat, 30 Nov 2024
Gloriously surreal with an important underlying message. You write in first person so well. A pleasure to read.
Read full commentPosted in The fickleness of new daylight
A deftly crafted elegy of
Posted on Mon, 02 Dec 2024
A deftly crafted elegy of sorts. I imagine this was a real person?
There's a lot going on between these lines underpinned by your trademark humour. I could touch and feel the conflicting emotions largely driven by religious undertones....
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Loved the ending, Jenny.
Posted on Tue, 03 Dec 2024
Loved the ending, Jenny.
A message for our time. Environment over greed.
If everyone followed this mantra, the world would be a much better place!
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"What a gift to the country,
Posted on Tue, 26 Nov 2024
"What a gift to the country,
what a gift to our world
the little beetle’s waste management
cleaning up our environment!"
I enjoyed the pulsing rhythm and rhyme of this.
It really is an interesting story and very...
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It's a curious one isn't it?
Posted on Mon, 25 Nov 2024
It's a curious one isn't it? Back to the old rhetoric of trade tariffs and deporting migrants. The world gets ever stranger.
Read full commentPosted in Liberal Disaster! by Alfred N.Muggins
"...robin flaunts red breast
Posted on Sat, 23 Nov 2024
"...robin flaunts red breast in
display, showing authority
this chilly day...."
That's a beautiful seasonal poem full of vivid imagery.
Love the pen picture of possibly my favourite bird of all. I adore robins...
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"..That’s a Charlie Manson
Posted on Fri, 15 Nov 2024
"..That’s a Charlie Manson quote,’ said Spencer.
‘Oh wow!’ Carol said, her voice loud and grating..."
Strong character building makes for an absorbing read.
The family interactions are so well done.
Read full commentPosted in Parcel for You..Part 41
Extended metaphor to
Posted on Mon, 18 Nov 2024
Extended metaphor to complement a real life conflict in the protagonist's story. That's advanced stuff. I particularly like the supernatural aspect - right down my street. High quality, Jane. Really well done.
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Something I have come to
Posted on Tue, 19 Nov 2024
Something I have come to realise as I get older is that all that's left in the end are memories. As long as we remember someone they live on.
Trying to make sense of it all probably does boil down to trying to enjoy every moment. Easier...
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