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Hi Hades,
Posted on Tue, 20 Jul 2021
Hi Hades,
on your question, I think it would bring some drama into the story, if you write about the shoot out at the jail, showing how the trouble came about, perhaps a couple of prisoners revolt, their need for freedom is so strong....
I feel quite sorry for Mark now, having gone so long without a shower and having to drink water out of the toilet, even though it is mostly his own fault.
I wonder if Hornblende will believe Mark when he tell him of his knowledge of Orion...
Commissioner Yeh seems to have never once shown any sign of weakness, even at what I would have thought was his lowest point, and he certainly seemed to have slept and ate well.
I thought the fact he was such an educated man, maybe had...
just finished reading this and it amused me no end. Would have loved to see the expression on Mr Wakelem's face at the end of the strip...what a sight to behold.
Loosing loved ones is heartbreaking, but Maria's father must have suffered even more, not even being able to say goodbye to his wife. What an awful time the family are having.
Hi Hades,
Posted on Tue, 20 Jul 2021
Hi Hades,
on your question, I think it would bring some drama into the story, if you write about the shoot out at the jail, showing how the trouble came about, perhaps a couple of prisoners revolt, their need for freedom is so strong....
Read full commentPosted in Disenchantment 37
I feel quite sorry for Mark
Posted on Tue, 20 Jul 2021
I feel quite sorry for Mark now, having gone so long without a shower and having to drink water out of the toilet, even though it is mostly his own fault.
I wonder if Hornblende will believe Mark when he tell him of his knowledge of Orion...
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Hi Rhiannon, how I remember
Posted on Tue, 20 Jul 2021
Hi Rhiannon, how I remember those early days of my son in your poem. You brought back those childhood memories.
Jenny.
Read full commentPosted in For a while …
Wonderful poem Rachel, full
Posted on Tue, 20 Jul 2021
Wonderful poem Rachel, full of the mysteries of the oldest stars and what they mean to you. Very impressed by those lines:-
Perhaps it is in the faces of gods we think
we glimpse in the cosmic birth of hydrogen giants,
or...
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So, this is the night Oren
Posted on Fri, 16 Jul 2021
So, this is the night Oren has been waiting for. Mark has definitely lost the plot, and his poor inocent dog Eddie didn't stand a chance, very sad.
Now I just want to know more about the black starless void...I wait with anticipation....
Read full commentPosted in Disenchantment 35
Took my time reading this
Posted on Fri, 16 Jul 2021
Took my time reading this part, there's so much of what Mark is thinking, which you express so well and is so readable.
Congrats, I'm so pleased to see this cherried, definitely well deserved.
Jenny.
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Commissioner Yeh seems to
Posted on Fri, 16 Jul 2021
Commissioner Yeh seems to have never once shown any sign of weakness, even at what I would have thought was his lowest point, and he certainly seemed to have slept and ate well.
I thought the fact he was such an educated man, maybe had...
Read full commentPosted in Maria's Diary 33
Hi Paul,
Posted on Tue, 13 Jul 2021
Hi Paul,
just finished reading this and it amused me no end. Would have loved to see the expression on Mr Wakelem's face at the end of the strip...what a sight to behold.
Thank you for the smiles. ...
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A visual poem you should be
Posted on Wed, 14 Jul 2021
A visual poem you should be proud of Rhiannon, I felt like I was there with you.
Jenny.
Read full commentPosted in A sleepy mid-July mid-afternoon
Loosing loved ones is
Posted on Tue, 13 Jul 2021
Loosing loved ones is heartbreaking, but Maria's father must have suffered even more, not even being able to say goodbye to his wife. What an awful time the family are having.
A poignant read indeed.
Jenny.
Read full commentPosted in Maria's Diary 32
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