Brent walked into the apartment and found Thies intently watching the clip of the man at Emily’s door. “No need to wonder where he went; I saw him in...
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Just caught up with this
Posted on Sat, 28 Oct 2023
Just caught up with this brilliant story; it's so original. I'm glad you decided to continue it. I think Pat might be setting up a steal; Vanesa might not want to break out the pj's with her around. I cannot wait for the next post.
I felt the sinister vibe the moment you described the loan shark, but I didn’t see the twist to vampire. The scene in the alley was unexpected and you captured the palpable fear as he ran back to the diner. Excellent set up and characterization....
Okay. I am hooked...please, please...post more soon; I have to know what happens. Great orginality in this story. "Husband to go"... what an intriguing beginning too.
Love the hope and the light in the end of this poem. I believe there is always hope...there is always a light you can follow, if you look for it. Beautifully written.
A Beautiful morning unfolds in your poem. I too love the Summer day at sunrise and the quiet of an early morning. It was peacful walking through his poem with you. Thank you for sharing it.
You’ve written a conscientious piece of poetry that begs for debate. A personal bug-a-boo for me; weed killers are poisonous to nature and us, and yet we don’t outlaw it anywhere, as we should. God created nature, weeds and all, and everything in...
Fascinating tale of devilry and fate; I did not see that ending either. So well done in characterizing the devil and his victim and I agree with previous comments, leaving it where it ended is the best ending, but it does tickle the desire for...
Great, evocative poem Jenny, alive with the storm you were experiencing and the fears you had as a child. Well deserving of golden cherries. I could feel the thunder and see the flashes of lightning across the sky in your very descriptive...
Just caught up with this
Posted on Sat, 28 Oct 2023
Just caught up with this brilliant story; it's so original. I'm glad you decided to continue it. I think Pat might be setting up a steal; Vanesa might not want to break out the pj's with her around. I cannot wait for the next post.
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I felt the sinister vibe the
Posted on Wed, 25 Oct 2023
I felt the sinister vibe the moment you described the loan shark, but I didn’t see the twist to vampire. The scene in the alley was unexpected and you captured the palpable fear as he ran back to the diner. Excellent set up and characterization....
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Okay. I am hooked...please,
Posted on Sat, 14 Oct 2023
Okay. I am hooked...please, please...post more soon; I have to know what happens. Great orginality in this story. "Husband to go"... what an intriguing beginning too.
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Love the hope and the light
Posted on Sat, 14 Oct 2023
Love the hope and the light in the end of this poem. I believe there is always hope...there is always a light you can follow, if you look for it. Beautifully written.
Read full commentPosted in Personal Pandora
A Beautiful morning unfolds
Posted on Sat, 14 Oct 2023
A Beautiful morning unfolds in your poem. I too love the Summer day at sunrise and the quiet of an early morning. It was peacful walking through his poem with you. Thank you for sharing it.
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Thank you JP for reading.
Posted on Sat, 23 Sep 2023
Thank you JP for reading. Cats are great pets too but maybe, a little more independent than dogs.
Read full commentPosted in "Alone..."
Thank you JP, glad you
Posted on Sat, 23 Sep 2023
Thank you JP, glad you enjoyed it.
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You’ve written a
Posted on Thu, 10 Aug 2023
You’ve written a conscientious piece of poetry that begs for debate. A personal bug-a-boo for me; weed killers are poisonous to nature and us, and yet we don’t outlaw it anywhere, as we should. God created nature, weeds and all, and everything in...
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Fascinating tale of devilry
Posted on Wed, 13 Sep 2023
Fascinating tale of devilry and fate; I did not see that ending either. So well done in characterizing the devil and his victim and I agree with previous comments, leaving it where it ended is the best ending, but it does tickle the desire for...
Read full commentPosted in Devil's Advocate
Great, evocative poem Jenny,
Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2023
Great, evocative poem Jenny, alive with the storm you were experiencing and the fears you had as a child. Well deserving of golden cherries. I could feel the thunder and see the flashes of lightning across the sky in your very descriptive...
Read full commentPosted in Tempestuous Stirrings
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