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64 of my comments have received 65 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Sun, 17 Sep 2017
person narration is notoriously difficult to pull off, but you've managed it well. What I like so much about what you do is the vast swathes of subtext, the gaps between the lines that are so tempting to fill and that we are unlikely to get wrong...Read full comment
Posted in The Oil Refinery
Posted on Thu, 14 Sep 2017
missed the "Flight" from Flight Lieutenant: No Lieutenants since the RFC became the RAF in 1918,
Best, Ewan, (former Flight Sergeant, No. 51 Sqn)Read full comment
Posted on Sat, 26 Aug 2017
like to think I am capable of separating the art from the artist.
Years and years ago I did A101 Arts Foundation course with the OU (it would have been about '83). At summer school in Hounslow (!) we trashed a whole afternoon with the...Read full comment
Posted in Evening Walk in a Seaside Town
Posted on Mon, 01 May 2017
a pleasure it was to have known a little about your father's father in your father's own words. There is so little to connect us goyim with the terrible things done in those dark days. Every time a survivor goes, another thread is severed....Read full comment
Posted in Shlamek
I read quite a few
Posted on Fri, 21 Jul 2017
eye-witness accounts of the evacuation. One of them had this:
"the angry hornet noise of dive bombers." So I do not take all the credit for that turn of phrase.
Many of these eye-witness reports were full of such observations, very...
Posted in No Armada
Posted on Mon, 17 Jul 2017
Very descriptive, some nice alliteration and imagery. I particularly liked your neologism, 'coolcurled'.
You have a typo, lizard has one 'Z'.
Do you really need to put 'ivy' at the end? A suitable accompanying...Read full comment
Posted in a sort of green
Really liked this.
Posted on Thu, 13 Jul 2017
You might want to think about the "I"'s lining the page like telegraph poles. It often happens with a first person narrator, I've done it myself. Once it's pointed out you always see it.
Utterly, utterly believable. I hope it's fiction,...Read full comment
Posted in What happens near Rome