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Us to a 'T'
I'm going to a Squadron reunion, this week-end. I always said I'd never do these things, but nostalgia is a powerful thing and I've been to a few now over the years. Anyway this one is for anyone who I ever served with, whether I liked them or not. Image is PD
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A Confederacy of C*ntses
Image created by me from PD elements Audio available.
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A Dream in my Pocket
Throw it on the track, you don't want it back. Image created by me using canva.com with pd and wiki commons elements.
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The Woman on the Other Side of the Screen
I wish I didn't have occasion to write this. It is a companion piece to "The Man on the Other End of the Phone" Image is a screenshot
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It Rains
Well it does rain, quite a lot. I did the image.
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Really liked this.
Posted on Thu, 13 Jul 2017
You might want to think about the "I"'s lining the page like telegraph poles. It often happens with a first person narrator, I've done it myself. Once it's pointed out you always see it.
Utterly, utterly believable. I hope it's fiction,...
Read full commentPosted in What happens near Rome
This is really good.
Posted on Fri, 30 Jun 2017
The voice as has been mentioned is really good. I like how much subtext there is. How much we're left to fill in for ourselves about your narrator.
Read full commentA couple of tiny things. Plural of taxi is taxis, there is an archaic form taxies, but it's...
Posted in Earth. Live. Neutral.
This rich
Posted on Sun, 18 Jun 2017
and textured riot of colour and blooms reminded me of Christina Rossetti's work. It is a deserved Facebook/Twitter Pick of the Day. Why not share or retweet if you like it too_
Read full commentPosted in The Ghost Queen.
terrific stuff...
Posted on Thu, 08 Jun 2017
As good on the ins and outs of the Basketball dream as Harlan Coben (it's a compliment)
best
Ewan
Read full commentPosted in Hello Walls (Chapter Four)
Two
Posted on Wed, 07 Jun 2017
Typos, it's Gauguin!
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Did
Posted on Sat, 27 May 2017
I tell you how much I like this? There is satire, menace, allegory, myth and fable, also some tight writing anyone would be proud to have written. It takes genuine talent to get all that stuff in a piece of writing without bashing people over the...
Read full commentPosted in Boatman's dream 22
Yes,
Posted on Tue, 09 May 2017
you could actually start from "The sun blazed". All the expository back story is a dense amount of telling about the characters. You could show a little all the way through.
"Most of the time he wore a light grey...
Read full commentPosted in Caiman's bazaar
For me...
Posted on Wed, 03 May 2017
and how I write (I know, we're all different) I'd keep banging these out and then edit when you've completed a narrative (arc or spiral, who cares?) This is all sufficiently intriguing for me to persevere. If Tim needs to go, get rid of him later...
Read full commentPosted in Boatman's dream 10
I do
Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016
agree with Jack that the ending seems a little rushed. I'm not sure I want to see (much) more backstory or a substantially longer piece, though. Have you thought about making the story arc more circular... start from just before where it...
Read full commentPosted in Flowers (Part Two of Two) (IP)
Splendid...
Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016
the welter of detail contrasts with the things you leave out. The combination of observation of the mundane and the barest of allusions to horrific deeds makes it all the more chilling. Fine stuff.
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