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school photos 28
On the train home, Jean thought she’d have been able to shut her eyes and get a quick nap, but her chesty- coughing cold scuttled that idea. She...
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school photos 27
I swept down the corridor to meet Mum, my head hunched, not meeting her eyes. She smiled a tight little smile in greeting, to show how unhappy she...
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Cenotaph
My death wilted in disorder A little note; a little chatter Could not find the chit Chapter in the crypt Right road but so wrong Country cemeteries...
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school photos 26
‘Hi Sweets.’ Janine rushed out of her room, just as John shuffled out of his, pulling the door shut behind him. ‘We’ll need to stop meeting this way...
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school photos 25
The girls’ bedroom door hushed slowly open. Jean had been sleeping as soundly as Joey’s snores allowed her to. Her body, however, was attuned to the...
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hard to get [h]old of
Posted on Thu, 14 Aug 2014
hard to get [h]old of
interesting, but needs split up into paragraphs. bit of a blob the way it's set out and likely to stop people from reading more, which would be a pity.
Read full commentPosted in No Man's land
Don't know why your shorten
Posted on Sun, 10 Aug 2014
Don't know why your shorten until to the more colloquial 'til in the last paragraph, a sudden colluquialism that doesn't quite gell.
Verm imaginative. I couldn't get grey man, but blue man, well, that set the tone.
Read full commentPosted in Shredding
humble and sad, but never bad
Posted on Sat, 09 Aug 2014
humble and sad, but never bad.
Read full commentPosted in Mistakes
I'm excited about what's
Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014
I'm excited about what's about to happen too.
Read full commentPosted in Out of Control-5
psalms [palms of hands]
Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014
psalms [palms of hands]
type out a candlestick
don;t don't
plenty or rain today and I know how the narrator feels.
Read full commentPosted in A late summers day
Fracking bomb is captialised
Posted on Wed, 30 Jul 2014
Fracking bomb is captialised and uncapitalised. I share many of your concerns.
Read full commentPosted in This life is a plastic wrap
yeh, who can afford to live
Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014
yeh, who can afford to live in DC? But you'd need a better imagination to figure house prices in London. 'buy a guy' sounds like an offer and not a preposition.
Oh, the Fab Four, sounds like some obscure band.
Read full commentPosted in 17. Do You Believe In Magick?
start chiselling now lavadis
Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014
start chiselling now lavadis
Read full commentPosted in Unbounders Away
not sure what a foofie valve
Posted on Wed, 02 Jul 2014
not sure what a foofie valve is, but the competition is hotting up.
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What I've read so far is
Posted on Wed, 02 Jul 2014
What I've read so far is intriguing.
Read full commentPosted in Competing - Prologue 1
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