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Howl Like a Wolf
In the chill hour
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All Who Are About To Die
Mind set
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I felt that panic I get in
Posted on Sat, 22 Aug 2015
I felt that panic I get in this situation. This would be a great one to read aloud at a reading, Rhiannon. Well worded and such a sharp contrast to your lovely nature walks I so enjoy. But I did enjoy this too. Excellently conveyed.
Read full commentPosted in Blue Mood Mall
Great story Tina. You've
Posted on Sat, 22 Aug 2015
Great story Tina. You've explored all the emotions beautifully. Once they'd decided the comparisons of the two life support machines and possibilities of disabilities for either child, the only real question was whether they could cope.
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In the face of impending doom
Posted on Fri, 21 Aug 2015
In the face of impending doom we bury our heads in the sand and worry about trivialities, because we can do nothing about the bigger picure, except feel oddly guilty for self imposed ignorance by necessity. Probably over thinking - but then, I do...
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Delicately done, Tina, and
Posted on Fri, 21 Aug 2015
Delicately done, Tina, and beautiful. Layered with meaning.
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The ending was perfect
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
The ending was perfect without being in any way slushy, because not only did it satisfacually tie the story together, it said all that needed to be said. It's a really sad story, and moving, but very realistic in all the outcomes, too.
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Hauntingly written, which by
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
Hauntingly written, which by the end I understood why.
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Lots of emotion expressed in
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
Lots of emotion expressed in this. Feels like it comes straight from the heart, and worth perhaps an edit. But that's just what I would do - keep working on a poem if I think it's worthwhile, and I do.
'ypur wide has pulled up the car' -...
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This is beautiful and wishful
Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015
This is beautiful and wishful. I do agree with scratch about the last verse. For me, it just goes over to the point of spoiling it a bit, but then I read again without the last verse, and I think it could work well if you cut it. Perhaps ending...
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Hi AE.
Posted on Fri, 14 Aug 2015
Hi AE.
I think you have edited this a couple of times and think it works really well now. There's uncertaity about change, and the question of whether there would be anything on the other side.
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'somehow thought that Sadie
Posted on Thu, 13 Aug 2015
'somehow thought that Sadie wasn't going to give up on this potential gold mine without trying again.' He gets a bit confused, I think, between the actual gold and the roll of twenty pound notes he thinks sadie's after.
I thought it's...
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