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^ agree with the above...i
Posted on Sat, 08 Nov 2014
^ agree with the above...i don't know anything about poetry but it looks to me to be very effective this style...the repeated mantra beginning and end...fragmented images and wishes and thoughts and then this key line that gives it something else...
Great controlled writing...I especially liked the fragmented thoughts 'Sam was so handsome don't you think?'/'Such memories' v effective. Great stuff :-)
^ agree with the above...i
Posted on Sat, 08 Nov 2014
^ agree with the above...i don't know anything about poetry but it looks to me to be very effective this style...the repeated mantra beginning and end...fragmented images and wishes and thoughts and then this key line that gives it something else...
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Very lovely, very sad.
Posted on Mon, 10 Nov 2014
Very lovely, very sad.
Great controlled writing...I especially liked the fragmented thoughts 'Sam was so handsome don't you think?'/'Such memories' v effective. Great stuff :-)
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