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Decided to stop talking about it and do it.
130 of my comments have received 131 Great Feedback votes
Oh this is a bit lovely! Love
Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015
Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...Read full comment
Posted in Summer Cannot Wait
Enjoyed this. Narrator is
Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015
Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...Read full comment
Loved the gloom and dread of
Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015
Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.
The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....Read full comment
Thanks again Maisie. I must
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015
Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.Read full comment
Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written
But the more she needed
Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015
But the more she needed josticks, whale songs and candles in the bath, the more I needed the likes of Barbie Is A Slut.
A wonderful line to underline the falling apart. I've been there - sick of the up your own arses and wanting to re-...Read full comment