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I have 116 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 140935 times and 146 of my stories have been cherry picked.
123 of my 1,402 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 122 votes

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Longing or '**** you, next door's cat.'

F*** you, next door’s cat, sunk in smug puddles of riddled fur, curled like a purring, steaming turd.
Cherry

Result (Inspiration Point)

So much behind the printer ink lies, behind the quantified, mapped, planned, calculated lives.
Gold cherry

Glass Swans

My mother’s mantelpiece holds three glass swans. Nobody knows where she got them from. I doubt she even remembers. 23 years they've been there. Mute. Tamed. Paddling like fuck to stand still. We’re only staying for a week.

Perspective

It's not the destination.
Gold cherry

Amy Amy Amy

Sailor-tat marionette a fag-end fishwife with your filthy laugh and oiled piston hips, a hot, wet Minnie Mouse. Gutter mouth.

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123 of my comments have received 122 Great Feedback votes

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Enjoyed this. Narrator is

Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015

Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...

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Posted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited

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Loved the gloom and dread of

Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015

Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.

The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....

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Posted in Two Minutes to Midnight - Opening Chapter

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Loved every single line of

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Loved every single line of this. This is heartbreaking but stays behind the line of melodrama with some stoicism. Excellent.

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Posted in A Friend Named Big Bird

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Thanks again Maisie. I must

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.

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Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written

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But the more she needed

Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015

But the more she needed josticks, whale songs and candles in the bath, the more I needed the likes of Barbie Is A Slut.

A wonderful line to underline the falling apart. I've been there - sick of the up your own arses and wanting to re-...

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Posted in Grown Man Cries In The Bahamas Chapter One

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Yet love 

Posted on Fri, 10 Jul 2015

Yet love 
was like a light flurry of snow 
never deep enough to lay new paths

What a stunning image a gorgeous poem.

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Posted in Fleeting fantasies

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A beautifully described

Posted on Fri, 10 Jul 2015

A beautifully described falling apart. Hermetically sealed, clipped up and washed down with antibiotics.

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Posted in The Cleaners

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Like a warm sweet nostalgic

Posted on Sun, 05 Jul 2015

Like a warm sweet nostalgic hug. A beautiful journey from envy to satisfaction and wistful maturity.

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Posted in The Old House By The Sea

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It's 4 am for me. Usually

Posted on Thu, 02 Jul 2015

It's 4 am for me. Usually when the kids wake up. When everyone else is asleep is when the thoughts start creeping in as you so powerfully described. It becomes a cycle which is highlighted so well by your structure and repeated time.

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Posted in A.M.

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Love them! And all they

Posted on Fri, 03 Jul 2015

Love them! And all they thought they stood for!

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Posted in The Wedding Picture

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