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I have 128 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 230176 times and 162 of my stories have been cherry picked.
130 of my 1,405 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 131 votes

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Attrition

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Slick vast crush of bare ocean, split white with dolphin crest and the roll and the roll, frets and worries at the lip of the world.
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For my sons... (Poetry Monthly)

If I ever get to see those pearly gates, misted like a distant hill, or if I'm caught on charcoal shores, waiting for the open hands of God, I'll draw for you, in all their grace, the sinners kissing angels' feet.
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Cherry

Passing Time

It's been years but you must remember the lights, hung gold orbs from that tree, on the river bank, silent. You must hear the horse's cry in the...
Cherry

One (Inspiration Point)

Excuse me. One's ever so sorry but if I could just take one minute of your precious time to talk about one thing that's on my mind it would be this:...

Cracked Actor

Your art was death. Your death was art.

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130 of my comments have received 131 Great Feedback votes

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Hot but not grubby! But you

Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015

Hot but not grubby! But you seem to have pasted it twice unless I'm going mad?

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Posted in Right Fit

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Oh this is a bit lovely! Love

Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015

Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...

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Posted in Summer Cannot Wait

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Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine

Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015

Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine but the missus is a mess - maybe her choice in men caused it. :)

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Posted in Hot Mommas

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Some really skilful use of

Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015

Some really skilful use of contrasts. The long lines really give it an atmosphere of melancholy.

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Posted in Feeling in the pit of my stomach

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Enjoyed this. Narrator is

Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015

Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...

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Posted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited

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Loved the gloom and dread of

Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015

Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.

The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....

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Posted in Two Minutes to Midnight - Opening Chapter

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Loved every single line of

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Loved every single line of this. This is heartbreaking but stays behind the line of melodrama with some stoicism. Excellent.

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Posted in A Friend Named Big Bird

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Thanks again Maisie. I must

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.

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Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written

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But the more she needed

Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015

But the more she needed josticks, whale songs and candles in the bath, the more I needed the likes of Barbie Is A Slut.

A wonderful line to underline the falling apart. I've been there - sick of the up your own arses and wanting to re-...

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Posted in Grown Man Cries In The Bahamas Chapter One

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Yet love 

Posted on Fri, 10 Jul 2015

Yet love 
was like a light flurry of snow 
never deep enough to lay new paths

What a stunning image a gorgeous poem.

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Posted in Fleeting fantasies

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