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Decided to stop talking about it and do it.
124 of my comments have received 123 Great Feedback votes
Loved the gloom and dread of
Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015
Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.
The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....Read full comment
Thanks again Maisie. I must
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015
Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.Read full comment
Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written
But the more she needed
Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015
But the more she needed josticks, whale songs and candles in the bath, the more I needed the likes of Barbie Is A Slut.
A wonderful line to underline the falling apart. I've been there - sick of the up your own arses and wanting to re-...Read full comment
It's 4 am for me. Usually
Posted on Thu, 02 Jul 2015
It's 4 am for me. Usually when the kids wake up. When everyone else is asleep is when the thoughts start creeping in as you so powerfully described. It becomes a cycle which is highlighted so well by your structure and repeated time.Read full comment
Posted in A.M.
You have some wonderfully
Posted on Fri, 03 Jul 2015
You have some wonderfully crafted lines in here. The reader moves from tiny detail to sweeping overview quite smoothly.
Needs some proof reading in areas such as '...few hours back. So that I cou...' and '...I did not even got the time...Read full comment
Posted in Goodbyes