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I have 117 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
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How many new cousins have you got? Four. Three with scars and sallow eyes. How many new sisters today? Dad's brought six. Four speak French and...
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Compassion Fatigue

Hey you. Yeah you. I know your grandad died last night but conjugate this verb. Get into groups now. Group one: Data says you're the smart kids...
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Heartwood

Strip the bark. Peel thin slivers of gritted question and whittled skin. But leave the heartwood. Pluck the leaves. Leave bald bird stalks that...
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A Letter to my New Tory MP

Dear Mr Rowley, I am writing to you, first of all to congratulate you on your recent electoral victory in North East Derbyshire. You did not receive...
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Out of the blue, one Indian summer you finally came. The waving, windmilling Captain of your destiny we said. Stubby legs would beat a heave-ho hard...
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123 of my comments have received 122 Great Feedback votes

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I love the cadence. To drop

Posted on Sat, 09 Dec 2017

I love the cadence. To drop the lines as you've done and maintain the mood is a skill. Agree with PhillipS the last line makes it.

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Posted in True nature

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I like this already. It's

Posted on Sat, 17 Dec 2016

I like this already. It's intriguing and snappy, has a first scene of a film feeling to it - breezy. It's not easy to write about football authentically so I'll be interested to see how you carry on with this. Keep posting and welcome to the site...

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Posted in The Loanee - Page 1

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I found the insertion of

Posted on Fri, 16 Dec 2016

I found the insertion of images jarring at first but when I got used to them it gave a powerful effect akin to 'We didn't start the fire.'

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Posted in subjected/ subjugated

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Absorbed by this. Put me in

Posted on Mon, 25 Jul 2016

Absorbed by this. Put me in mind of the opening chapter of 'The Curious Incident...' not just with the plot but also with the (very different) twist on the everyday your protagonist has. Is this the start of something?

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Posted in Witnesses

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Great voice. Clipped prose.

Posted on Tue, 12 Jul 2016

Great voice. Clipped prose. Dances along nicely. Would love to read more. Welcome!

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Posted in Memoirs of a Wanna Be: Intro and Chapter 1

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Great re-write. Much more

Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016

Great re-write. Much more focused and evocative.

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Posted in Her

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Reminded me of Plath in some

Posted on Mon, 11 Jul 2016

Reminded me of Plath in some lines. Great writing.

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Posted in Addicts

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This is gorgeous - the rose

Posted on Fri, 08 Jul 2016

This is gorgeous - the rose lines in particular. Can I make a suggestion to steer away from some cliches like 'lit up every room'? The rest of your lines are so well crafted you could go for something more obscure.

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Posted in Beautiful

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I think there's loads to love

Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016

I think there's loads to love in here. One bit I thought you could change would be
'With a certainty 
Of knowledge
Which ironically
Belies her 
Relatively minimal
Years.'

In my opinion it's a little...

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Posted in Her

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This is beautiful! Such sharp

Posted on Sat, 02 Jul 2016

This is beautiful! Such sharp lines and juxtaposing images left me emotionally battered and bruised. Great work!

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Posted in La Boisselle (Raprochement)

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