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I have 123 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 502845 times and 167 of my stories have been cherry picked.
126 of my 1,328 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 128 votes

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Attrition

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Slick vast crush of bare ocean, split white with dolphin crest and the roll and the roll, frets and worries at the lip of the world.
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For my sons... (Poetry Monthly)

If I ever get to see those pearly gates, misted like a distant hill, or if I'm caught on charcoal shores, waiting for the open hands of God, I'll draw for you, in all their grace, the sinners kissing angels' feet.
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Cherry

Passing Time

It's been years but you must remember the lights, hung gold orbs from that tree, on the river bank, silent. You must hear the horse's cry in the...
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One (Inspiration Point)

Excuse me. One's ever so sorry but if I could just take one minute of your precious time to talk about one thing that's on my mind it would be this:...

Cracked Actor

Your art was death. Your death was art.

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126 of my comments have received 128 Great Feedback votes

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Made me cry. I often think of

Posted on Sun, 11 Oct 2015

Made me cry. I often think of what my grandfather went through with his home help and his days in a home. Maybe I've coloured this too much with me but I couldn't stand the nosey, gabbing narrator you've created here. Great work.

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Posted in It's Only Me, Mrs. Jenkins

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You have such an ear for

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

You have such an ear for sound but manage to spell phonetically clearly and unusually so we can get the flavour, even the sounds of the phlegm.

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Posted in Curiosity.

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Hot but not grubby! But you

Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015

Hot but not grubby! But you seem to have pasted it twice unless I'm going mad?

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Posted in Right Fit

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Oh this is a bit lovely! Love

Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015

Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...

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Posted in Summer Cannot Wait

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Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine

Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015

Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine but the missus is a mess - maybe her choice in men caused it. :)

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Posted in Hot Mommas

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Some really skilful use of

Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015

Some really skilful use of contrasts. The long lines really give it an atmosphere of melancholy.

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Posted in Feeling in the pit of my stomach

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Enjoyed this. Narrator is

Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015

Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...

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Posted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited

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Loved the gloom and dread of

Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015

Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.

The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....

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Posted in Two Minutes to Midnight - Opening Chapter

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Loved every single line of

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Loved every single line of this. This is heartbreaking but stays behind the line of melodrama with some stoicism. Excellent.

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Posted in A Friend Named Big Bird

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Thanks again Maisie. I must

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.

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Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written

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