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I have 117 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 145424 times and 147 of my stories have been cherry picked.
123 of my 1,406 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 122 votes

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Antidote

Written for a friend. Inspired by Tony Cook's excellent - 'Grumpy Old Man'.
Cherry

A Passing (IP)

Under silent cityscape penumbra flits a linen shroud in billowing black.
Cherry

Liberty

For France. They will never be free from the crimes they commit.
Cherry

The Gurkha Soldier

Bravest of the brave, most generous of the generous, never had country more faithful friends than you. Professor Sir Ralph Turner MC

A Shuffling Up.

When younger, the word of God was writ large in every cloud. Every beat of every heart was a plan. A fate unreeling. An ocean of moments in an arrow...

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123 of my comments have received 122 Great Feedback votes

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Eerie but heartwarming.

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

Eerie but heartwarming. Driven by tides. A few simple errors (ever/y) but a really atmospheric piece.

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Posted in Home

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Oh I do like the ending of

Posted on Wed, 11 Nov 2015

Oh I do like the ending of this. Is it me or could you replace 'record' either the first or second time? Love the way your rhyme scheme builds.

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Posted in Return to Sender

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I enjoyed this. At times, it

Posted on Tue, 10 Nov 2015

I enjoyed this. At times, it can seem a little like you've over-used the thesaurus! Sometimes the simplest words are the most effective. However, that doesn't detract from some controlled sentence variety and a nicely plotted arc. Is there more...

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Posted in Ice Heart

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Made me cry. I often think of

Posted on Sun, 11 Oct 2015

Made me cry. I often think of what my grandfather went through with his home help and his days in a home. Maybe I've coloured this too much with me but I couldn't stand the nosey, gabbing narrator you've created here. Great work.

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Posted in It's Only Me, Mrs. Jenkins

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You have such an ear for

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

You have such an ear for sound but manage to spell phonetically clearly and unusually so we can get the flavour, even the sounds of the phlegm.

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Posted in Curiosity.

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Hot but not grubby! But you

Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015

Hot but not grubby! But you seem to have pasted it twice unless I'm going mad?

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Posted in Right Fit

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Oh this is a bit lovely! Love

Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015

Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...

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Posted in Summer cannot wait

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Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine

Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015

Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine but the missus is a mess - maybe her choice in men caused it. :)

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Posted in Hot Mommas

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Some really skilful use of

Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015

Some really skilful use of contrasts. The long lines really give it an atmosphere of melancholy.

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Posted in Feeling in the pit of my stomach

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Enjoyed this. Narrator is

Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015

Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...

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Posted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited

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