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I have 117 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 145612 times and 147 of my stories have been cherry picked.
123 of my 1,406 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 122 votes

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Cherry

For my sons... (Poetry Monthly)

If I ever get to see those pearly gates, misted like a distant hill, or if I'm caught on charcoal shores, waiting for the open hands of God, I'll draw for you, in all their grace, the sinners kissing angels' feet.
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Cherry

Passing Time

It's been years but you must remember the lights, hung gold orbs from that tree, on the river bank, silent. You must hear the horse's cry in the...
Cherry

One (Inspiration Point)

Excuse me. One's ever so sorry but if I could just take one minute of your precious time to talk about one thing that's on my mind it would be this:...

Cracked Actor

Your art was death. Your death was art.
Cherry

Half-Moon Cuticle

I heard you in a crowd. Spun a half circle, spread my arms. I flung myself at nothing and stood wide open.

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123 of my comments have received 122 Great Feedback votes

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Full of stunning, standout

Posted on Mon, 08 Feb 2016

Full of stunning, standout lines but by no means just those - a wonderful atmosphere I just can't touch. You move from claustrophobia to expanse in a few short words.

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Posted in Karelia (Poetry Monthly)

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Your structure and short

Posted on Sat, 06 Feb 2016

Your structure and short lines work well here. Effective. Not sure 'deaths ordain' works and shouldn't there be some apostrophes? The ending is strong though.

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Posted in Apart

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I love the little world of

Posted on Sat, 23 Jan 2016

I love the little world of this. Very well chosen images which develop the conceit. 'Unlearned like spellings' is one of my favourites.

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Posted in Never forget smoking

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There's a wonderful depth and

Posted on Sat, 23 Jan 2016

There's a wonderful depth and weight to your lines. I wonder if it would be punchier if you were to remove some verbs and prepositions such as 'are, which, where' etc. May shorten the lines without impacting on the meaning - making it starker....

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Posted in Bridge Street

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Beautiful, original images of

Posted on Fri, 22 Jan 2016

Beautiful, original images of pork, spongy wood and sulphur flags. The 'until' in line 5 jars a bit but can't explain why. Well crafted.

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Posted in The Wood Eaters

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Harsh and bleak.

Posted on Fri, 22 Jan 2016

Harsh and bleak. Cold and frigid. I loved the hardiness of the buzzards 'winning'. A final nail.

I thought in these lines that the focus was less intense. Possibly that 'bows' already hints at deference so no need to repeat.

'Grass...

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Posted in Seven Days Frozen

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This is a great teaser!

Posted on Tue, 08 Sep 2015

This is a great teaser!

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Posted in Nothing About Nothing

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You have a real skill for

Posted on Sun, 15 Nov 2015

You have a real skill for blunt, expressive prose. Can be a little overcooked at times I feel. You may need some softer moments to avoid it verging on parody. Great style - reminiscent of Ludlum or Lee Child, even Wilbur Smith before he went...

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Posted in TATORT FOUR - 2

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Your poems are little car

Posted on Sat, 21 Nov 2015

Your poems are little car journeys. They never fail to encapsulate the feeling of a time and place. They also give me space to think. 

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Posted in Light in the Dark Age

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Lovely flow to this poem.

Posted on Sun, 22 Nov 2015

Lovely flow to this poem. Could me maudlin and cliched like so many 'sea' poems but your short but long lines and stark imagery skilfully avoid this. I love the sound.

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Posted in Muse

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