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Decided to stop talking about it and do it.
123 of my comments have received 122 Great Feedback votes
There's a wonderful depth and
Posted on Sat, 23 Jan 2016
There's a wonderful depth and weight to your lines. I wonder if it would be punchier if you were to remove some verbs and prepositions such as 'are, which, where' etc. May shorten the lines without impacting on the meaning - making it starker....Read full comment
Posted in Bridge Street
Harsh and bleak.
Posted on Fri, 22 Jan 2016
Harsh and bleak. Cold and frigid. I loved the hardiness of the buzzards 'winning'. A final nail.
I thought in these lines that the focus was less intense. Possibly that 'bows' already hints at deference so no need to repeat.
'Grass...Read full comment
Posted in Seven Days Frozen
You have a real skill for
Posted on Sun, 15 Nov 2015
You have a real skill for blunt, expressive prose. Can be a little overcooked at times I feel. You may need some softer moments to avoid it verging on parody. Great style - reminiscent of Ludlum or Lee Child, even Wilbur Smith before he went...Read full comment
Posted in TATORT FOUR - 2