this meeting of trees and rushes glows, peaceful as a holy place warbler songs shimmer warm blue air where speckled wood butterflies dance from spine...
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I really liked the tornado,
Posted on Tue, 02 Sep 2025
I really liked the tornado, too! And Danielle's practicality after he had been imagining cannibals, as she wonders which local island :0) Also the description of them going across the rocks is great
I think of writer's block being like a desert peopled with shadows, but your words here are like rain, enabling millions of flowers to spring up from dry sand
You are keeping up the pace really well! I like how Jade is thinking of possibilities that had not occurred to Thomas as perhaps he has the potential to be a bit frustrating, always used to being in control. However maybe he will be good for Jade...
I liked very much the fort, and your descriptions of wildflowers. Your way of his passing the time on his walk, thinking, was great :0) And the casual way at the end, you mention he often sees people who might not be there, adds to his quality of...
I like how you are introducing all the characters from the first part. And Marcus Whale is great - scary, wild, hurt, always on the outside. Did the dog want to stay in the lift, or go out if the doors opened somewhere interesting? There is a...
I really liked the tornado,
Posted on Tue, 02 Sep 2025
I really liked the tornado, too! And Danielle's practicality after he had been imagining cannibals, as she wonders which local island :0) Also the description of them going across the rocks is great
Read full commentPosted in Prophesy: The Immortal Witch (7)
Love :
Posted on Mon, 01 Sep 2025
Love :
tranquil distant hills
keeping their ancient secrets.
Spry and pure spirit of torrent,
fly across blessings bestowed
I am happy you have rain at last, and hope your garden has some soon, too, so you can...
Read full commentPosted in A Moment To Ponder
Agree with Claudine and Drew,
Posted on Fri, 22 Aug 2025
Agree with Claudine and Drew, found this very well thought out and described, really convincing
Read full commentPosted in The Patrolman - 37 (1/2)
I think of writer's block
Posted on Mon, 25 Aug 2025
I think of writer's block being like a desert peopled with shadows, but your words here are like rain, enabling millions of flowers to spring up from dry sand
Read full commentPosted in When All Seems Lost
Agree with Jenny, I really
Posted on Sun, 24 Aug 2025
Agree with Jenny, I really like how you are developing Constable John's character in this part
Read full commentPosted in Denied (Episode 22 - The Further Chronicles of a Young Lady (and her Maid))
You are keeping up the pace
Posted on Sun, 24 Aug 2025
You are keeping up the pace really well! I like how Jade is thinking of possibilities that had not occurred to Thomas as perhaps he has the potential to be a bit frustrating, always used to being in control. However maybe he will be good for Jade...
Read full commentPosted in "Art of Trouble" 5
Love both the word-sound and
Posted on Mon, 25 Aug 2025
Love both the word-sound and meaning of
"be more than beckoned to
by an Ice-cream van tinkle
or a sprinkle of glitter"
there must be so many, many questioning "why do we do, what we do?" these terrible days
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I love "Clustering in clouds
Posted on Tue, 19 Aug 2025
I love "Clustering in clouds that shade" and "welcome showers"
Read full commentPosted in That all-important molecule!
I liked very much the fort,
Posted on Tue, 19 Aug 2025
I liked very much the fort, and your descriptions of wildflowers. Your way of his passing the time on his walk, thinking, was great :0) And the casual way at the end, you mention he often sees people who might not be there, adds to his quality of...
Read full commentPosted in Prophesy - The Immortal Witch (6)
I like how you are
Posted on Sat, 16 Aug 2025
I like how you are introducing all the characters from the first part. And Marcus Whale is great - scary, wild, hurt, always on the outside. Did the dog want to stay in the lift, or go out if the doors opened somewhere interesting? There is a...
Read full commentPosted in The Vale - Chapter 6
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