I might have left it too late for the kenning I.P. and not sure I've got it right anyway as I think they should be more literal. But I was so taken up with the kenning idea that I thought I'd give it a go. Thanks for the idea and hope the I.P. keeps going.
Brilliant. It starts in one
Posted on Fri, 28 Nov 2014
Brilliant. It starts in one place and then goes somewhere I didn't expect and ends up with this terrible loneliness of the wild geese flying, but in that those last few words there's some feeling of stillness.
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I'm definitely with the last
Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014
I'm definitely with the last stanza too. Some beautiful sense of continuity in those lines. Maybe what makes them so effective is the almost matter of fact opening? A bit like keeping a log. It's obviously struck a chored, must be one of those...
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This is intriguing which I'm
Posted on Sat, 13 Sep 2014
This is intriguing which I'm not sure I've spelt right? And original. I like the structure, with the spaces in between. Loads of lovely descriptions, it wants to be read again. And the last two lines are great!
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Likewise. I liked the bit
Posted on Fri, 12 Sep 2014
Likewise. I liked the bit about the strong spirit in the frail body. That strength won't leave you.
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I wondered if your memory of
Posted on Sun, 02 Feb 2014
I wondered if your memory of it is the same now that you have put it into words? I love all the small detail you put into your poems and how those small things can trigger a memory and one leads to another. I liked it a lot but for some reason...
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Hello. I had to go for a
Posted on Tue, 22 Oct 2013
Hello. I had to go for a quick log in to say what a glorious read this is. NOt quite sure what a jibberwak is, sorry, but I could see the night clearly and the words like a voiceover moving through it. I loved the long sentences and the bizarre...
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