35 of my comments have received 33 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Thu, 08 May 2014
I'm concerned about the leggy jumper? is this a real jumper? mine only have arms...lol!
plus some of the descriptions of the doggies shortness - a vertical disability -are over emphasised and read a little bit clumsy and I personally...Read full comment
Posted in Small Secrets
I really like the flow that
Posted on Sat, 03 May 2014
I really like the flow that you've put into this paragraph poem. I do feel however to improve it you should take some time to read it aloud to yourself, then you can hear/feel/see where you can make your poem work much smoother. You will find...Read full comment
Posted in The Happiness is Arriving
I really liked this poem, and
Posted on Thu, 26 Dec 2013
I really liked this poem, and yet wondered if it would do better broken into stanzas, especially if you were to read it aloud, a break is possible after oxygen? and then after 'past you've never shared..'
shall i shut up now>lolRead full comment
Posted in Consistence