I don't write much about my 23 years in the blue suit, when you've read this, you'll probably see why. Image is a mock-up, (fake) made from PD elements.
Um.. yes... well, 'fraid you'll have to read it to figure out what it's on about... But then that's the point, isn't it? Image made by me. No copyright infringements committed. Read the footnote. (Afterwards).
I liked the marching. Although I'm not a fan of the monarchy. I do not relish the prospect of an elected head of state, we all know who would be first to throw their name in the hat. The coronation is the very epitome of "spaffing money against the wall". Other opinions are available. Image created by me at canva.com
chapter, or part is significantly tighter than some of the others for me. As usual the dialogue is really punchy. Sometimes, not here, but in the next part for example, you have a tendency to use a received phrase (this is what we used to call a...
I like that it's coming in big chunks that need to be digested slowly. There's just the right hint of the fey in it, and it's a neat trick to have the everyday seem a little sinister.
and none of the rhymes seem forced. An insistent rhythm that serves the subject well. A little unconvinced by one or two of the images. "severed souls impaled upon a pike" - for example - although I appreciate you may well be using soul as person...
Short and sour,
Posted on Wed, 21 Jul 2021
and also very good. I do like the spaces left for the reader to fill in.
Well done.
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Nobody's
Posted on Fri, 16 Jul 2021
first draft is perfect.
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This episode,
Posted on Fri, 16 Jul 2021
chapter, or part is significantly tighter than some of the others for me. As usual the dialogue is really punchy. Sometimes, not here, but in the next part for example, you have a tendency to use a received phrase (this is what we used to call a...
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This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day
Posted on Tue, 06 Jul 2021
a fabulous biece of SFF that promises much, I can't wait for the next instalment. Why not share and/or retweet if you like it too, Readers?
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Splendid.
Posted on Thu, 17 Jun 2021
I like that it's coming in big chunks that need to be digested slowly. There's just the right hint of the fey in it, and it's a neat trick to have the everyday seem a little sinister.
Keep going.
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Woody wouldn't
Posted on Wed, 02 Jun 2021
mind if you asked him, I suspect he'd laugh if I did though.
Wonderful poetry, full of depth and meaning.
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Thanks Ross,
Posted on Tue, 25 May 2021
it's best to get these memories down before they go.
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Marvellous
Posted on Mon, 10 May 2021
tough tenderness, moving and true-to-life. Well done.
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Marvellous
Posted on Thu, 29 Apr 2021
and ends particularly well.
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Scans well,
Posted on Wed, 21 Apr 2021
and none of the rhymes seem forced. An insistent rhythm that serves the subject well. A little unconvinced by one or two of the images. "severed souls impaled upon a pike" - for example - although I appreciate you may well be using soul as person...
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