I don’t know what’s happened to this week. It’s like a salt and vinegar crisp someone holds under your nose. You turn your head away, you turn back, and it’s gone. Just gone.
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I enjoyed this one two
Posted on Thu, 02 Jul 2020
I enjoyed this one two although would have liked a foxy twist in the tale once you've introduced Hargreaves and a buried dog and a loose rung and a threat. Anyway... do you know George Saunders foxy take? ...
As Celticman said, good story. I think you need to build up the voodoo element, introduce it more slowly. How did he know about voodoo dolls etc? And have more than one thrust of the pin. After doing it the first time there's a recovery and then...
I liked this, like the other one, the strange wasted characters. But like the other one I think you need to put some plot and tension in there. And when I say plot you could do worse than look at Brautigan - in sombrero fallout a sombrero falls...
Neither particularly long and in no way arduous. Deep felt and honest but in a general way that shouldn't make you feel you have posted something overly personal. And very excellent. Obviously. Did I say that?
I enjoyed this one two
Posted on Thu, 02 Jul 2020
I enjoyed this one two although would have liked a foxy twist in the tale once you've introduced Hargreaves and a buried dog and a loose rung and a threat. Anyway... do you know George Saunders foxy take? ...
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Brilliant. Loved it. And what
Posted on Sun, 28 Jun 2020
Brilliant. Loved it. And what a great idea. National Insect Week.
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As Celticman said, good story
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020
As Celticman said, good story. I think you need to build up the voodoo element, introduce it more slowly. How did he know about voodoo dolls etc? And have more than one thrust of the pin. After doing it the first time there's a recovery and then...
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I mentioned Spike Milligan
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020
I mentioned Spike Milligan the other day. And this reminds me of him too.
Read full commentPosted in Tormentors' Just Desserts
I liked this, like the other
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020
I liked this, like the other one, the strange wasted characters. But like the other one I think you need to put some plot and tension in there. And when I say plot you could do worse than look at Brautigan - in sombrero fallout a sombrero falls...
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It is beautiful and sad. All
Posted on Sun, 07 Jun 2020
It is beautiful and sad. All loved pets are receptacles of pain.
Read full commentPosted in Iriecat
Is Tom McNulty's the family
Posted on Tue, 02 Jun 2020
Is Tom McNulty's the family shop?
You've got too many 'de's in there at the beginning so it becomes a thing.
Cathal needs to be in there in the first line. It's a cautionary tale.
Have you read Damon Runyon...
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If anger's in a drawer I don
Posted on Thu, 28 May 2020
If anger's in a drawer I don't want to enter it... nice one onemore x
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Neither particularly long and
Posted on Sat, 23 May 2020
Neither particularly long and in no way arduous. Deep felt and honest but in a general way that shouldn't make you feel you have posted something overly personal. And very excellent. Obviously. Did I say that?
Drew
Read full commentPosted in How To Be Authentic
Both films are bonkers and
Posted on Sat, 09 May 2020
Both films are bonkers and brilliant.
If allowed, I'd be a blue whale. Because you'd get to see things you'd never otherwise see...
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