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I became a teacher for many reasons, one of them being Mr. Badger. Mister Badger was my history teacher during my junior year. Badger associated good...
He got him some cigars and some scratches For the price of a Yankee Budweiser. Some chips full of horses and radishes To remember a birthing, oh yes...
in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...
My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”
yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo
simply irresistible
Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017
a few clean up notes
get rid of a couple "littles"
clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"
seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...
Read full commentPosted in Wrinkles
kayfabe
Posted on Sat, 10 Mar 2018
Kayfabe is a carnival term for never letting a non- carny in on the secrets of the carny. Wrestling has a long association with carnivals.
Bad guys are always bad guys in kayfabe and they hate good guys in kayfabe which is like pretending...
Read full commentPosted in Donald Trump in the beginning
i'm beginning to agree
Posted on Mon, 18 Dec 2017
in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...
Read full commentPosted in Ralph and Big Dave
I like it
Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017
I think I could use some indentations.
My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”
want might be will
Good work...
Read full commentPosted in Eyes
very promising
Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016
I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?
Read full commentPosted in Mistress and Servant Part 1
paragraphing is important
Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016
yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo
Read full commentPosted in Play, You...Play Me