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jerry ryan
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Buddy Drops the Mike
The bullshit political correctness regarding bigotry, racism, sexism, homophobia, drinking, smoking and ass grabbing had deprived Buddy (the Bulldog...
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A Stream Under Maybay Moon
Right now, at this very instant, I am writing in the stream of consciousness. Writing in the stream is a telepathic method of telling you what I've...
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Butterfly ( I Say Essay)
Every night I fall asleep while thinking about writiing. Eventually, a fraction of these thoughts will turn into words that stay. They will turn into...
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Full
At first, I was a "when are we gonna get there" type kid, like every kid on early journeys. The monotony of every journey was interrupted by stops at...
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Many Journeys Start With A Snipping
Al Aguglia had been going to Phil the barber for haircuts since Phil was a kid just starting his one chair shop. Al stopped off for his regular...
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simply irresistible
Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017
a few clean up notes
get rid of a couple "littles"
clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"
seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...
Read full commentPosted in Wrinkles
The problem comes in when I'm
Posted on Sat, 28 Jul 2018
The problem comes in when I'm writing a novella. If the scenes don't attract attention in the beginning, they become far less "compelling" to new readers as the work continues. As of now, only 11 peple at the most, are up to date on what I'm...
Read full commentPosted in Short Cherry Rant
kayfabe
Posted on Sat, 10 Mar 2018
Kayfabe is a carnival term for never letting a non- carny in on the secrets of the carny. Wrestling has a long association with carnivals.
Bad guys are always bad guys in kayfabe and they hate good guys in kayfabe which is like pretending...
Read full commentPosted in Donald Trump in the beginning
i'm beginning to agree
Posted on Mon, 18 Dec 2017
in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...
Read full commentPosted in Ralph and Big Dave
I like it
Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017
I think I could use some indentations.
My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”
want might be will
Good work...
Read full commentPosted in Eyes
very promising
Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016
I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?
Read full commentPosted in Mistress and Servant Part 1
paragraphing is important
Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016
yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo
Read full commentPosted in Play, You...Play Me