ice rivers

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I have 343 stories published in 14 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 46022 times and 52 of my stories have been cherry picked.
5 of my 207 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 5 votes

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My stories

This Is Your Writer Speaking

Your writer has been reading about languages that don't include the pronoun "I" and instead use the relationship of the first person to the second...
Cherry

Showdown on Main Street

Every so often, I'll find a volume in my library that takes me by surprise. I don't remember acquiring the book so I don't remember the moment that...

A Review of Mother

I'm a big fan of solipsism. Rarely have I seen a film as solipsistic as Mother starring Jennifer Lawrence among many others. I'm going to try to...

wrinkle

wrinkle, wrinkle, little scar earned while flirting at the bar up above my throat so high on the eyelid of my eye i no longer see as clearly whenever...

Fatigue

Fatigue is the enemy of both urgency and connectivity. Urgency and connectivity are essential elements of writing. We have an idea, we've got to...

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5 of my comments have received 5 Great Feedback votes

1 Vote

simply irresistible

Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017

a few clean up notes

get rid of a couple "littles"

clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"

seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...

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Posted in Wrinkles

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I like it

Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017

I think I could use some indentations.

My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”

want might be will

Good work...

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Posted in Eyes

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ain't cherries great

Posted on Wed, 16 Mar 2016

the problem is they become addicting. I'm starting to almost reach the point that I want my stories to be cherry winners instead of just stories and we know what kind of art that generates. Don't let the cherries go to your head...take this...

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Posted in One Night Between

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very promising

Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016

I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?

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Posted in Mistress and Servant Part 1

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paragraphing is important

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo

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Posted in Play, You...Play Me