ice rivers

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I have 374 stories published in 15 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 58126 times and 65 of my stories have been cherry picked.
5 of my 251 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 6 votes

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jerry ryan

 

My stories

Phantom Thread...Elongated Elegance in the Room

Part Pygmallion, Part Last Tango in Paris, Mix in some Henry James along with a huge dose of ACTING and DIRECTING and we have arrived at the recipe...

Cold Clocked

The cold coclusion to The Clock Is Ticking

Clock Is Ticking

I take full responsibility for my actions. I planned the whole thing out down to the day, to the hour, to the minute even to the second. I spent...
Cherry

Addicted...Ignoring a Warning From Wolf

In my first years of teaching, I was always suspected to be "some kind of nut" because of the length of my hair. Apparently, I didn't "look"like a...
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5 of my comments have received 6 Great Feedback votes

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simply irresistible

Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017

a few clean up notes

get rid of a couple "littles"

clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"

seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...

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Posted in Wrinkles

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i'm beginning to agree

Posted on Mon, 18 Dec 2017

in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...

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Posted in Ralph and Big Dave

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I like it

Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017

I think I could use some indentations.

My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”

want might be will

Good work...

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Posted in Eyes

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very promising

Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016

I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?

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Posted in Mistress and Servant Part 1

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paragraphing is important

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo

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Posted in Play, You...Play Me