27 of my comments have received 30 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017
a few clean up notes
get rid of a couple "littles"
clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"
seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...Read full comment
Posted in Wrinkles
Traumas scalded to retinas indeed
Posted on Sat, 01 Aug 2020
It's not enough to close our eyes and pretend trauma didn't happen. Even with our eyes closed, our heart has a vision of its own that persists like Camembert melting on an abandoned shore that never retreats into the waves of non-chalance.Read full comment
Posted in To my imaginary child
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2020
When I was a kid, my teacher said that it was impossible to read all the books in our school library even in the course of a lifetime. Now that I'm getting older, I feel an urgency to read the ones that I've missed and I realize that I have soo...Read full comment
Posted in "Once Upon a Place to Read"
Posted on Thu, 25 Jun 2020
really sets a scene....not sure if I like the last name "Seeker" but aside from that I took the journey and can relate to it. I definitely enjoy your writing and appreciate your comments on mine and yeah Jenny is a great help isn't she.Read full comment
Posted in "Antediluvian Trouble" Chapter 3
Posted on Tue, 23 Jun 2020
I'm begiining to rethink the significance of closed eye inspiration. When we're listening to music, it's natural to close our eyes...particularly when listening to jazz. Our readers can't close their eyes when they read, unless they're reading...Read full comment