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Ping and Percy in Florida.

By ice rivers on Mon, 08 Apr 2019

Good for you if you surmised that Percy was an ostrich. Better for you if you guessed that Ping was an Italian ballplayer. Ping Bodie pretended that...

Historical Fiction

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Percy and Ping

By ice rivers on Fri, 05 Apr 2019

One hundred years ago, exactly more or less....... Percy had huge eyes and lashes. Percy had big feet and a long neck. Percy had a pea brain and even...

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The Pursuit of Free Beer

By ice rivers on Wed, 03 Apr 2019

The sign outside the dive read "Free Beer Tomorrow". I was near broke and of considerable thirst. I took a seat at the bar at noon. I asked the...

Surreal

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Effortless Observation of Youth

By ice rivers on Sat, 30 Mar 2019

After returning from a very brief but enjoyable walk around my neighborhood, I took a seat on my porch. A kid from across and down the street emerged...

Unclassified

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7 of my comments have received 8 Great Feedback votes

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simply irresistible

Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017

a few clean up notes

get rid of a couple "littles"

clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"

seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...

Posted in Wrinkles

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The problem comes in when I'm

Posted on Sat, 28 Jul 2018

The problem comes in when I'm writing a novella. If the scenes don't attract attention in the beginning, they become far less "compelling" to new readers as the work continues. As of now, only 11 peple at the most, are up to date on what I'm...

Posted in Short Cherry Rant

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kayfabe

Posted on Sat, 10 Mar 2018

Kayfabe is a carnival term for never letting a non- carny in on the secrets of the carny. Wrestling has a long association with carnivals.

Bad guys are always bad guys in kayfabe and they hate good guys in kayfabe which is like pretending...

Posted in Donald Trump in the beginning

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i'm beginning to agree

Posted on Mon, 18 Dec 2017

in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...

Posted in Ralph and Big Dave

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I like it

Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017

I think I could use some indentations.

My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”

want might be will

Good work...

Posted in Eyes

1 Vote

very promising

Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016

I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?

Posted in Mistress and Servant Part 1

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paragraphing is important

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo