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| Story | Counting | Ewan | 3 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Larry and Mick Give it Some Oomph | pepsoid | 1 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Up In Alaska | evancromwell | 1 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Not Pixar | deloszorros | 4 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Infinite | deloszorros | 1 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Trans-gression | iwylie | 3 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Release | TheShyAssassin | 2 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Virtual dating | justahuman | 2 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Handbags and Crocodile Shoes | luigi_pagano | 4 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Brightness without burning | Rhiannonw | 11 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | The Princess of Odd Numbers | london_calling79 | 0 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | AFTER | Richard L. Prov... | 5 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | last grin | tibi popovici | 2 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | St John’s (after Van Morrison) | ralph | 1 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Oh God, I Love You | evancromwell | 1 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Sid And Nancy | YaseminB | 2 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Goodnight America | socialeaf | 6 | 8 years 3 weeks ago |
| Story | Pants | Ewan | 1 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | Splatters | Richard L. Prov... | 8 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | Umbrella 1 | Steve | 2 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | Dictated access | justahuman | 6 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | If Only I Was There | mcscraic | 1 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | Water Under The Bridge | harveyjoseph | 1 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | Why the devil won't be coming over for coffee | evancromwell | 1 | 8 years 4 weeks ago |
| Story | A Typical Acid Trip | evancromwell | 2 | 8 years 1 month ago |





Made me cry. I often think of
Posted on Sun, 11 Oct 2015
Made me cry. I often think of what my grandfather went through with his home help and his days in a home. Maybe I've coloured this too much with me but I couldn't stand the nosey, gabbing narrator you've created here. Great work.
Read full commentPosted in It's Only Me, Mrs. Jenkins
You have such an ear for
Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015
You have such an ear for sound but manage to spell phonetically clearly and unusually so we can get the flavour, even the sounds of the phlegm.
Read full commentPosted in Curiosity.
Hot but not grubby! But you
Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015
Hot but not grubby! But you seem to have pasted it twice unless I'm going mad?
Read full commentPosted in Right Fit
Oh this is a bit lovely! Love
Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015
Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...
Read full commentPosted in Summer Cannot Wait
Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine
Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015
Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine but the missus is a mess - maybe her choice in men caused it. :)
Read full commentPosted in Hot Mommas
Some really skilful use of
Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015
Some really skilful use of contrasts. The long lines really give it an atmosphere of melancholy.
Read full commentPosted in Feeling in the pit of my stomach
Enjoyed this. Narrator is
Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015
Enjoyed this. Narrator is interesting and the reader gets in their side as they speak some universal truths. Having said that the tonal shift in the first few paragraphs was a bit much for me - there was a good voice developing that I feel was...
Read full commentPosted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited
Loved the gloom and dread of
Posted on Sun, 19 Jul 2015
Loved the gloom and dread of this piece. Well told too. One bit I may change would be the pronoun shift from 'he' to 'it' at the start.
The idea of a fantasy showing who you really are is a fascinating one and I hope you mine it further....
Read full commentPosted in Two Minutes to Midnight - Opening Chapter
Loved every single line of
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015
Loved every single line of this. This is heartbreaking but stays behind the line of melodrama with some stoicism. Excellent.
Read full commentPosted in A Friend Named Big Bird
Thanks again Maisie. I must
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015
Thanks again Maisie. I must say I'm happy with that particular stanza. The 'ing' is supposed to show an incomplete action in the past - is if it occurred over a longish period of time which is what I was aiming for. Personal taste I guess.
Read full commentPosted in Mirror Angels - re-written
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