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Attrition
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Slick vast crush of bare ocean, split white with dolphin crest and the roll and the roll, frets and worries at the lip of the world.
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For my sons... (Poetry Monthly)
If I ever get to see those pearly gates, misted like a distant hill, or if I'm caught on charcoal shores, waiting for the open hands of God, I'll draw for you, in all their grace, the sinners kissing angels' feet.
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Passing Time
It's been years but you must remember the lights, hung gold orbs from that tree, on the river bank, silent. You must hear the horse's cry in the...
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One (Inspiration Point)
Excuse me. One's ever so sorry but if I could just take one minute of your precious time to talk about one thing that's on my mind it would be this:...
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Cracked Actor
Your art was death. Your death was art.
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Your poems are little car
Posted on Sat, 21 Nov 2015
Your poems are little car journeys. They never fail to encapsulate the feeling of a time and place. They also give me space to think.
Read full commentPosted in Light in the Dark Age
Lovely flow to this poem.
Posted on Sun, 22 Nov 2015
Lovely flow to this poem. Could me maudlin and cliched like so many 'sea' poems but your short but long lines and stark imagery skilfully avoid this. I love the sound.
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Eerie but heartwarming.
Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015
Eerie but heartwarming. Driven by tides. A few simple errors (ever/y) but a really atmospheric piece.
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Oh I do like the ending of
Posted on Wed, 11 Nov 2015
Oh I do like the ending of this. Is it me or could you replace 'record' either the first or second time? Love the way your rhyme scheme builds.
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I enjoyed this. At times, it
Posted on Tue, 10 Nov 2015
I enjoyed this. At times, it can seem a little like you've over-used the thesaurus! Sometimes the simplest words are the most effective. However, that doesn't detract from some controlled sentence variety and a nicely plotted arc. Is there more...
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Made me cry. I often think of
Posted on Sun, 11 Oct 2015
Made me cry. I often think of what my grandfather went through with his home help and his days in a home. Maybe I've coloured this too much with me but I couldn't stand the nosey, gabbing narrator you've created here. Great work.
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You have such an ear for
Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015
You have such an ear for sound but manage to spell phonetically clearly and unusually so we can get the flavour, even the sounds of the phlegm.
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Hot but not grubby! But you
Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015
Hot but not grubby! But you seem to have pasted it twice unless I'm going mad?
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Oh this is a bit lovely! Love
Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015
Oh this is a bit lovely! Love the word choices - very different. If I may make a suggestion it would to be to remove the capitals at the start of each line - disrupts the flow a little. You can break a line easily to draw attention to certain...
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Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine
Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015
Cheers Claudine! I'll be fine but the missus is a mess - maybe her choice in men caused it. :)
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