David Kirtley

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I have 140 stories published in 7 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 47559 times and 8 of my stories have been cherry picked.
12 of my 246 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 13 votes

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David Kirtley

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Commemoration For D Day

Commemoration For D Day Thousands of soldiers flung onto the North Coast of France. Normandy here we come! Young and malleable, dutiful and primed,...

Pied Piper

Pied Piper Pied Piper, Nigel Farage, Mirage Man – now you see him, now you don’t! Where will we see him next? Will he really be there? Or is he just...

West Wales

West Wales You can’t get much wester in Wales than Haverfordwest. We actually came here before, last year, when the toilets in Lidl’s were out of...

Welcome In Welsh

Welcome In Welsh The hills are alive with the light of the sun. The rain never came to Wales. The mountains are growing, the sea is calling. The kids...

Conundrums, Referendums and Anti Semitism

Its a conundrum that we just can't solve. Should we stay or should we go? Will we wreck our economy or lose our rights? Or will we save a hell of a lot of money and give tax cuts to the rich?

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12 of my comments have received 13 Great Feedback votes

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Your story is developing well

Posted on Thu, 06 Feb 2014

Your story is developing well with surprising twists. There was no explanation of why she chose to awake or use Antares. How did she know about this demon? It might be worth including a sentence or two on these questions.
Also I think it...

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Posted in Euphoria Blake: Infernally Divine

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A promising story, encourages

Posted on Thu, 06 Feb 2014

A promising story, encourages me to read further. I do think that second long paragraph needs breaking up into smaller paragraphs. You have the mother's disappearance and the father's death both in the same paragraph, but they are different...

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Posted in Euphoria Blake: Infernally Divine

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