Calban journeys across the City to a semi dark area, in need of economic regeneration. Unable to find female companionship he has come here searching for other ways forward. This is part of my 'Marta City and Gallanol In The Modern Age' novel, set in a futuristic period, in a world quite similar to our own.
Your story is developing well
Posted on Thu, 06 Feb 2014
Your story is developing well with surprising twists. There was no explanation of why she chose to awake or use Antares. How did she know about this demon? It might be worth including a sentence or two on these questions.
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A promising story, encourages
Posted on Thu, 06 Feb 2014
A promising story, encourages me to read further. I do think that second long paragraph needs breaking up into smaller paragraphs. You have the mother's disappearance and the father's death both in the same paragraph, but they are different...
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