The Best Selling Novel (just a small beginning part)

Just the first seven pages... I wanna know what people think before I post more!!! FYI I am 14 so I'm sorry if it's a little bit iffy.

heres the full summary -

Deirdre, a young mother, finally has enough courage to become a real published writer, working for a Chicago magazine company. However, her life goes downhill when her husband cheats and when her brother is killed in an accidental shooting. After the tragity, life must go on for Deirdre, which is very hard. She allows her husband, now ex, to take the kids away as she grieves over her brother's death just to find out that the kids no longer want to see her when she's ready to take them back into her life. Many years later, Deirdre is about to loose the one last thing that makes her happy: her job. Her boss looks into hiring someone new: a talented writer named Kevin. Kevin uses writing as an escape from his shady past. Both Kevin and Deirdre compete for the job by writing the best literary work that they can, but in the mean time they grow close and develope a passionate romance. Kevin ends up writing his story about Deirdre, and he also encourages her to reconnect with her kids. Deirdre, also very happy with the relationship, opens up to Kevin and tells him everything about her personal life & past, including the murder of her brother. But one day Kevin is mysteriously gone, leaving no evidence of where he went, which causes Deirdre to dig up some information about his past, just to find out that he had been lying to her all along about everything. Now Deirdre's life is thrown off as she has to choose whether to keep writing with her heartbreak or give up - and also, could she ever get closure with Kevin?