Smoking me out
By Beeme
Sun, 06 Mar 2011
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My body
lies stagnant
a lake,
winding around
chesnut trees.
A forest of cuts;
shuttered in light
a place that hurts,
the red earth
of your arms…
dead-ends.
The dark cigarette
of your mouth,
smoking me out
from the shadows.
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It hurts to read this and I
It hurts to read this and I think it is really very good indeed.
;)Pia
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Absolutely stunning, Beeme.
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Absolutely stunning, Beeme. I'm really enjoying these short poems - every single image here is just perfect. Very well done!
Magic xxx
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Well done, again, Beeme. I
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Well done, again, Beeme. I too am much enjoying these. Love the imagery again.
Tina xx
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Nothing here hasn't been
Nothing here hasn't been thought about carefully (probably with a lot of revision?) - very good Beeme. :-)
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Yes, very good - powerful
Yes, very good - powerful images.
(Did you mean 'stagnate' or 'stagnant'?)
Rob
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i really enjoy the way you
i really enjoy the way you expertly place your words on the page. almost as if the words were gracefully falling from the page. enjoyed this one :)
cheers,
jose.
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