The Boy's Companions - Prologue
By danijammy
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Atop a hill sat a kingdom which had long distanced itself from any neighboring lands. It required no trade or assistance of any kind. This seemingly utopian region was able to be completely self-sufficient due to its bountiful food and water, as well as its perfect climate, and hardworking residents. It came to be known as Earthhaven.
Due to its independent nature, the only thing Earthhaven lacked was allies to help protect from barbarians and invaders. This inevitably caused conflict when they were threatened by a witch who had become jealous of the king.
Even the best knights were no match for her, so Earthhaven had to look to the other kingdoms for help. However, none were interested in assisting a king who didn't care to form an alliance until he desperately needed it.
Altonis, however, could not turn their back on a kingdom in need, despite not being able provide much due to the impoverished nature of their land. They immediately formed a pact in the hopes of being compensated after the defeat of the witch.
A war then immediately broke out between the witch's forces and the newly united Earthhaven and Altonis. Their small contributions turned out to be enough, and Altonis was able to help in defeating the witch, but not until after Earthhaven took a great deal of devastation from the witch's initial attacks.
With their own damages to worry about, Earthhaven was unfortunately unable to properly repay their new allies for their efforts. This lead to hostility between residents of the the two provinces for the next several years.
It wasn't until decades later that the agression ceased, when an agreement was made between the two kings. Earthhaven and Altonis were to be united after the marriage of Princess Abigail and Prince Alton.
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Hi Danielle - it's quite hard
Hi Danielle - it's quite hard to provide feedback on this. As you say, it's a prologue, so the fact that it doesn't go into much detail, and is quite impersonal is perhaps something that you'll be dealing with later, in the main part of the story. I suppose, though, that a prologue's purpose is to make the reader want to know more, so maybe you need something a little more enticing - about the characters involved, some events?
The narrative flows nicely though, and apart from the above, is well paced. I'd definitely read more!
One typo I noticed: 'Even the best knights were no match for the her'
Hope that all helps. Welcome to ABCTales!
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