Explorer
By D Marie
Fri, 31 Aug 2012
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He is off again,
Giving strength to daydreams,
Taking hikes on the air and breeze,
Levitating on currents,
Blown away with vision.
Don't take offence
As we flicker in and out
Offering only what captures his world;
The light behind your eyes
The message inside your voice
The purpose for your movements,
Him, looking at you with questions,
You, looking to him for answers.
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I like it, Dogstails. It's
Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on
I like it, Dogstails. It's rather atmospheric, which is difficult to pull off in such a short poem.
It needs capital letters at the beginning of each stanza and possibly some commas to break it up. And it's 'captures,' not 'capture's,' - but apart from those little niggles it's a pleasing piece.
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