A Dad’s work is never done …! (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 13 Sep 2013
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Come the rain, son, I’ll mend your train,
come the rain, Ma, I’ll try again
to fix those shelves, and mend that hole,
find a place to store your kitchen coal …

 

’Til the rain come, I must press on
there’s jobs outside just waiting to be done
– can’t do that work in rain, it’d spoil –
come the rain, I’ll rest with different toil!

 

[IP: Waiting for the rain]

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Comments

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Rhiannon,

A good take on the I P as usual.  Succinct and to the point if that's not tautologous.  And you have cleverly referenced change is as good as  a rest.

Nice one,

Moya

 

 

 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I had to check the meaning of 'tautology'! I think we say 'succinct and to the point' to emphasise, don't we? Anyway, I'm glad you thought it was, and told me. The idea played around in my mind when I wasn't trying to think about the IP! regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Rhiannon,

A good take on the I P as usual.  Succinct and to the point if that's not tautologous.  And you have cleverly referenced change is as good as  a rest.

Nice one,

Moya

Whoops tried to get rid of this one but it wasn't having a bar of it!.

 

 

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

What an interesting interpretation of the IP Rhiannon.  Snappy and only too believable!

Linda

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you again, Linda. Dads do get pulled all ways sometimes! And as Moya said, a change can be sort-of equivalent to a rest! regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon. Such a lot to think about in so few words.

Enjoyed.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for letting me know. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Busy old Dad. When it's fine he's outside working on the parsnip bed. Come the rain, everyone's given him their list of must-do jobs!

This poem would work well in a childrens' anthology with good illustrations.     Elsie

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Well, that's an idea! Thank you Elsie. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Really enjoyed this, Rhiannon, and has been said, a really original take on the IP. 

My other half is outside planting potatoes as I speak.  He says he'll fix the blocked sink...later, if it rains;-)  Think I'll do it myself....but, on second thoughts, perhaps not;-)

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Tina, glad you enjoyed. Must put a word in for these hard-working men!

regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Short and sweet and full of truth.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean - I enjoyed reading it again!! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

So did I, Rhiannonw.  I wish I could be on here more often, but at the moment not much time.  Everything seems to take so much longer than I have time for.

Have a lovely Christmas

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you Moya, how lovely to hear from you. It's been a tough year for you, and I hope you too are able to share joy at Christmas time. love, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Thank you, Rhiannon.  Yes. I have family coming, my two daughters and husband and partner, my grandson, Derek's twin sister and his youngest sister and her husband so a full house which I like.

I wish you joy at Christmas too!

Moya xx