Lucy's in the Sky (Poetry Monthly)

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sat, 12 Mar 2016
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8 comments
 
looking down
on that hill
looking down on
 
neon orange lights
aflame...
ablaze;
 
the town
a beacon...trees
hung with rain
 
sky – purple
as bruises
on the thin
skin of a child,
 
Lucy’s; she’s in the sky
with diamonds...
 
counting them each
and every one
 
because all’s
been said, and
the undoing’s
been done
 
a song
unwritten
a song 
unsung because
 
Lucy’s in the sky
with diamonds
and she
still counts them
 
one
by one
by one...
Certificate 15
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by VeraClark on

Repetition has an undoing effect. Beautiful. 

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

So pleased you thought so, Vera.

Hope you manage to spend a peaceful weekend.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I liked the fast pace. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Bee, and all the best to you this Saturday morning.

Tina

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Tina

What a beautiful poem and also the picture to go with. You can't beat the view of a night sky on a clear still night.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks for that, Jean.  You most certainly cannot.

Tina

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Splendid imaery... repeatedly!!

Terry

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Terrysmiley Thanks, Terrysmiley Thanks, Terrysmiley

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