Wound

By MistakenMagic

Mon, 05 Oct 2009
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14 comments
 

The bullet hole snuggles
up to my collar bone.

It is your mark;
your scarlet seal of wax
stamped onto my flesh

and I will treasure it,
this little ruby well
that is mine, and only mine.

It is my poisonous poppy
that out-bleeds all of those roses
that you gave the others.

It will be my medal of bravery
that clings to my chest.

And I will never let it heal –

because it remains the only thing
of value that you have ever given me.

Certificate U
Poem
The Poet Who Fell in Love
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Beeme on
Beautiful, I really like this. The ending is perfect, and I loved this verse the best; "It is my poisonous poppy that out-bleeds all of those roses that you gave the others." Well done :) Beeme XX

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Beeme! I think that's my favourite verse too - but I am a sucker for anything with a 'popp' in it :P Magic xxx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Well you just knew that I was going to like it. Well done, great write. ;) XXX

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Chris ;) Another war one just for you! Hey - less than 5 days to go! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Curse of 222 on
where did i put that damn pineapple? i love the closing lines. riveting and powerful...vintage mistakenmagic! jason (rogue half-rhyme)

jason

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Jason! You know you make me smile everytime I see you attaching your 'nickname' to your own ;) Live on rogue half-rhyme! Magic xxx (Clumsy Simile)

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Nathan! Really glad you enjoyed this one ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by vidit.chopra on
I think I should stop posting comments on your work! The reason is that every time I read something written by you, I am always short of words. I simply can't express myself in words! All the above posted comments are apt for this one. There is nothing else I can say.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Completely missed this one, dear Magic. Still, better late than never, as they say;-) As has been said, this bears all your hallmarks and I love the saracasm in the last line. Well done;-) Tina xxx

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Hey there vidit.chopra! Please don't ever stop commenting, it's reviewers' comments that make me want to keep on writing ;) Even if you have to come out with random words I'll always appreciate the support! Tina - glad I'm keeping the 'hallmark' alive ;) Completely agree - better late than never! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Mistakenmagic this is sad lines is it true I like lines It remains the only thing of value you have ever given me. I always get pricked by pin putting poppy in buttonhole julie xx.

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Hello Julie! Yes, unfortunately it is true. But I think heartbreak is a sort of rite of passage for every teenager! Glad you liked the last lines ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Mistakenmagic sorry how old. Me too last week but not 50 yet. done "Togetherness" given me from funeral her sister.Life is cruel and unexpected sometimes. Iv'e tried angry with mine, "One To The left and One To The Right" need all help and ideas try out. I'm just getting ready early night Dr's morning. so haven't answered all verses fully of your lovely poem. There always great. "Your lifting me higher and higher"Song song. julie xx (:-

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you SundaysChild! Magic xxx