As good as it gets
By AliciaB
Sat, 28 Nov 2009
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The lights are off.
You are sleeping
Next to me.
A benign mass;
A trunk of warmth.
There is a silence
In your mind I think.
And tonight we forget
About everything;
The things we wanted,
The things we'll never get.
I creep my bitten nails
Down your back.
I want to prod you
From it's-been-a-long-day sleep.
But this generous
Imperceptibality, my darling,
This leaden harmony,
Is perhaps as good as it gets.
I feel no animosity for you,
A strong amiability,
And perhaps, my love,
(There are no others),
This is as good as it gets.
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Very Beautiful, I love the
Very Beautiful, I love the ending. Much enjoyed,
Beeme xx
k.
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gorgeous!! thankyou for
Permalink Submitted by bodypolitic on
gorgeous!! thankyou for sharing. you really invited the reader in. much appreciated :)
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this is a very intimate
this is a very intimate scene. However two phrases pulled me from the flow. Benign statue doesn't work for me - can a statue be anything but? Also 'finger you' jars (to me it is too sexual - could just be me, of course.)
Juliet
Juliet
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truly beautiful - in both
truly beautiful - in both its style and its concept
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new 27 Congatulations on the
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new 27
Congatulations on the cherry'
and I thought to same as juliet OC.
beautifully done'I thought at first
it was the bitten finger nail's.
silly me.But it's all part of life"
as you have put.
julie x cavalcader
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I really enjoyed this. I like
Permalink Submitted by rainingalloverthesky on
I really enjoyed this. I like 'love' poetry to be raw, real, sans rainbows and butterflies. Sometimes it really is as good as it gets; and that's ok.
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