Missed a comma

You missed a comma
dare I say more?

You asked me to look at a story
so I'll underline a few lines
Maybe suggest you elaborate a bit here
and cut back a bit there
The seventh paragraph assumes knowledge on the part of the reader
so maybe you could do something there

Dare I ask if you are OK?
This isn't just a story
this is your story
Are you sure you want it up there
where everyone will read what's in your heart and mind at
leisure?

You use 'knight in shining armour' too much
I was never a fan of that concept
Well, not until recently
but that's another story

So how come we've been friends this long
and I never knew you had the same fear
The same crippling fear?
Yes, we joked about what we did not want
Why didn't you tell me you were afraid to want it?

Why didn't I tell you?
that's another story

You know the part where you talk of the call?
Maybe you can add a little atmosphere there