A Hard Week's Work

Cherry

By ashleemale

Thu, 27 Nov 2008
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EDITING

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Submitted by ashleemale on
this is not actually complete. i think i need to do a lot more work but i had writers block. suggestions please... personally i think i should develop the voice of the first person more, develop what happens in his fantasies, etc etc.

Submitted by tcook on
It works very well as it is. I really don't think you need to go into more detail about him - we know all we have to know.