Metaverse

By Chris Whitley

Sat, 31 Jan 2009
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When I'm in my element
I conjure up an elephant
But of course it's just a symbol for a problem in my life

And when I'm in my altitude
I have another attitude
then I'm rather prone to say the strangest things

And if I want to say much more
then I tame a metaphor
to perform a clever trick, a rabbit from a hat

So when we speak of reality
I imagine it's just a formality
to make the many sound just like one

And therefore if I think I am
I could as well be a hologram
as the thinker, the observer, and observed

But if you find this schizophrenic
or even hallucinogenic
then we beg your pardon one and all

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Submitted by Geoff Smith on
It's very jolly - for the most part I think the rhythm works well. I'm sure you've practised and all and are certain about the way it should sound. When you write: then I tame a metaphor to perform a clever trick, as a rabbit from a hat could you just say a rabbit from a hat as then you'd have a kind of double metaphor in that line that might make the humour clearer rather than muddling things with a simile? Just a suggestion you understand. Enjoyed reading this. JM

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by Chris Whitley on
Hi JM, thank you for reading it and giving your good advice. You are right; it is better. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again Chris P.S. I'll takea look at your stuff