Not Quite Yet

Cherry

By EB

Wed, 22 Jul 2015
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9 comments
 

Not here yet -

despite flash flood lit -

blackened sky's foreboding 



threats; broken promises 

and sweat. Tension's

skull-bright wakes up

more than rain.



Will river burst 

and ocean drown us?

Bring us beer, we're thirsty,

calm us down



please... drawing closer

by the minute

Not here yet, but listen -

feel it distant... still

approaching fulmination



storming in 

anticipation of a stark

solution to a problem

seemingly unsolvable.

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You describe the tension tautly, and the slipped in rhymes help the flow. To me it seems to indicate that the approaching dreaded trouble might be somehow a solution, but couldn't there be a better one? So many aspects to difficulties, and the limitations of our human sight and abilities. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by EB on

Thanks for your thoughts on this. Much in what you say.

Submitted by Bee on

As Rhiannon says - the trouble might be the solution, but is there another way? Good question.

Bee

Submitted by EB on

Thanks Bee.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Much to think about, here, EB.  Well put, and congrats on the cherries.

Tina

 

Submitted by EB on

Thanks Tina.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Very dramatic - great poem 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by EB on

Cheers Accidentally.

Submitted by EB on

Thanks Eds for the cherries. Very much appreciated.