Reflection of Selfpity

By ellesmara

Mon, 16 Jun 2008
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I've been here, and there
Most days.

I've been going and stopping all the time.

It's my choice, they say.

Only you can decide what you do.

My only problem is that it's not me deciding.

They lie, through their sharp teeth.
Hissing, whispers of persuasion in my ear.

My dreams don't matter.
It is theirs that do.

Certificate U
Poem
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by ellesmara on
What does everyone think? selfish, self righteous, in-the-right??? give it to me people!

Submitted by tcook on
You can obviously write well - but I've just read your three latest offerings and they read well but they tell me very little. I think you have to go beyond what happens and suggest the consequences - emotional and physical - for the writing to really make a connection.

Submitted by ellesmara on
awesome - thanks!