Deprived for Air

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By epiph

Mon, 20 Nov 2017
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I close my eyes

you are there

I open them

you are there

 

I awake gasping for air

 

I want to ask you to hold me

I want to tell you I want only you

 

Ding...I check my screen

it's not you

my heart sinks a little

 

A night pretending to be someone else

my heart sinks even further

I awake feeling empty and deprived 

 

I hold my breath...

 

I can't be in your space without you

deprived of air

I only want you

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by insertponceyfre... on

Welcome to ABCtales Epiph. A very heartfelt piece!

If you're looking for suggestions, then it's usually deprived OF something. Hope that helps

 

Submitted by epiph on

Thanks for taking the time to provide feedback. I think early appreciate any and all constructive criticism. I haven’t written a word in almost 20 years. Digital art is how i expenses myself. 

Submitted by PoppyS on

Been there, not a good feeling.

Pops ~xx~

Writing is art in pictures – Go paint poetry!

Submitted by epiph on

Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. Appreciate the support.