Lovers Parting

By hedgehog1

Sat, 09 Sep 2017
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Laying in the dark the warmth of you beside me

Waking from our sleep our hearts are intertwined

Gold moonlight plummets as dawns display arrives

Shadows of the trees play gently on the ceiling

As I wish you stay and not leave me shaking here alone

Quietly you say you're love must be set free

This burden breaks my heart and so you quietly leave me

Defeated by your utterance I lay sobbing on the bed

But like lovers from the past whose perfect love has waned

Let us both part now and turn to the kiss of another

So our once perfect love may blind me no more

 

Sculptured art by Luigi Bartolini, (Parting) with no copyright issues

Certificate U
Poem
Romance
Love

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Edward,

it's so hard when one person's love turns cold. That misapprehension that the victim thought was real, now just a memory that only time will heal.

Your poem reflects those feelings so well in this poingnant poem.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Thank you Jennifer such a reflective review. I never know how a poem will turn out when I start writing, but, the title was the catalyst for how I wrote "Lovers Parting"

Edward

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

The sudden changefrom apparent peace and love, in line 5 comes as quite a shock.

It does seem to indicate an expectation of both quickly finding a new relationship. Until one has insisted on that and really broken the established shared love, by joining with someone else, I would hope the other would be wanting, hopeing for healing.

Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Thank you Rhiannon for your comments, as I wrote to Jennifer I never know how a poem will turn out when I start to write. I'm glad you picked up on line five, but it was not mean to shock, it was how I perceived one of the pair (the man) had decided to end their relationship.

Edward