Free a fallen star
By Kahdai
Sun, 07 Mar 2010
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Stars
turn cold
when caught
in snare, left
as stone, lose that
sparkles of theirs.
No light within,
no life, you win.
Full of hope
fullfill any wish.
Another
bright star, too tempting,
has to leave this world.
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'Stars turn cold when
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Stars
turn cold
when caught
in snare'
- love these lines, Kahdai! (Jenna :p) I would just suggest you chande the next lines to:
'as stone, lose that
sparkles of theirs.'
just so it flows better and makes a little more sense ;)
Again, really love this one!
Magic xxx
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