PAIN

By kheldar

Sat, 27 Mar 2010
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9 comments
 

Pain
Constant pain
Not quite physical
A mental pain
An invisible wound.

Constant pain
My life is ruled by it
Its tendrils ensnare me
Its power engulfs me
At times it overwhelms me.

Not quite physical
Still it has marked me
In shadows beneath my eyes
In lines across my forehead
In scars upon my skin.

A mental pain
It squeezes my mind
It crushes my soul
It robs me of pleasure
It steals away my sleep.

An invisible wound
I live with it
I endure it
I strive to bandage it
I fight it.....

I fight it!

COPYRIGHT DM PAMMENT 26th MARCH 2010

Certificate 15
Poem
THE INNER CONDITION
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Very powerful, David! It's so true that the worst pains aren't actually physical but mental and emotional. I really felt this one, well done ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thank you Rebecca for reading and commenting, your thoughts in particular are always most welcome. David xx :--)

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I really felt this, too, David. The short sentence structure you have used in this poem, really serves to hammer home the intense feeling so eloquently illustrated by your words. A big 'well done' from me too;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by notgotacluenat on
I couldn't agree more with Rebecca & Tina's comments. I definately felt this. Brilliant writing!Natalie xx

Natalie xx

Submitted by kheldar on
To Tina and Natalie, my humble and grateful thanks. As you will know, writing free form stuff takes me well beyong my safety zone, its reassuring to receive complimentary feedback. Thank you. David xx :--)

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Submitted by shoe on
It's hard to capture the feeling of pain when it has passed, you have done that, I like the defiance in the last verse. xx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Shirley xx :--)

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Submitted by seannelson on
an interesting poem, Kheldar
"If I send you post-cards from the side of the road: photographs of movies, and hearts about to implode"  -  Elliott Smith

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks for reading sean

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