“When I am gone …”

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 28 Feb 2014
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‘No-one will worry when I die,
they’ll all be glad when I am gone,’
‘Do you love them? Do you try?
or think about yourself alone?’

‘If you show them that you care
then some will miss you and be sad;
If you take an interest, share,
when you’re gone they won’t be glad.’

 

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Submitted by VeraClark on

Poignantly true, Rhiannon.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Vera. So difficult for someone caught up in themselves to see. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Good point, well made that if we involve ourselves in the lives of others this involvement may be mutual. Open to debate too. A person can run themselves ragged caring for a truly thankless individual, another may have some-one care about them simply because the second person is the caring sort. I have 2 daughters and the younger is far more emotionally there for me than the elder. It's not about right or wrong it's sometimes simply about the way we're made.       Elsie
 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

We are all different, of course. My point was simply about someone who seemed to feel he could grumble/moan in this way, but has a seeming inability to think about others' needs. I think it is a bit physical, and maybe some sort of depression, feeling of inferiority, and maybe he just didn't learn as a youngster to look out from himself. But the fact remains that if he could show a bit more concern and interest, then he would receive more concern, and would be remembered one day with more affection, if that is what he wants! I hope that makes some sense! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Yes it makes sense. When a person grumbles a lot it can create a distance between the grumbler and the listener. I am sure you are right about the person who is the subject of your poem     Elsie

Submitted by Bee on

Food for thought here, Rhiannon. Very true, but difficult to do when depressed. It's a vicious circle.

Good poem.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I'm glad you found it so, Bee. Thank you for telling me. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

I liked it too because I think you are right.  What is that saying  'It is better to give than to receive.'  There are people who are takers and there are people who are givers.  I know which I find the most appealing.  A poem with a moral.

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Yes, Moya, so right, and in just 'taking' you don't realise what you are missing until you try 'giving', I suppose! The saying you are trying to remember is probably 'we must help the weak, remembering the words the Lord Jesus himself said: "It is more blessed to give than to receive" ' in Acts 20:35 in the Bible.

regards and thank you for reading through and commenting on all these pieces,
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Used to be a saying of my grandma's, 'You only gets out, what you put in'.  An over simplification in this case, but true, to a degree.

There is much food for thought in your poem, Rhiannon. Well, and succinctly, put.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tina. This had been burbling in my mind and my computer a while! and on my heart.
Your grandma's saying applies well to marriage doesn't it - TV romances give rather an artificial expectation! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

There is a lot of food for thought in this little poem.

 

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Yes, it had been on my mind for some time before I submitted it. Rhiannon