mixed blessings

By seannelson

Wed, 25 May 2011
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acid rain
and perfect pesticide raspberries,
the needed medicines
that disturb the body so

hard day's night
and hard night's day,
cold wind blowing
though it's now mid May

I wish things were better;
but what can I say?

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Comments

Submitted by maisie on
nice aliteration: although i read somewhere that you should break it up with a word or two. However i tend to shove the rules under the rug. :)

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by seannelson on
yeah, I agree about rules and the rug, especially when the rule is just a contemporary fad. With a degree in Literature, I'm aware of an ancient tradition of direct alliteration, one of the great poetic devices like literary referencing and alternating rhyme(though these are all options, not requirements for great poetry.) <]:- ) friendliest regards, Sean
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